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    paigerwaiger94 Posts: 87, Reputation: 3
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    Jul 22, 2009, 01:17 PM
    My new poem.
    I cannot make him mine.


    I cannot seem to make him mine.
    Though I try so hard sometimes.
    Another lonely night,
    Is spent here without him.
    Tears fall with the first light,
    Because I cannot make him mine.


    I cannot seem to make him mine.
    Though I try so hard sometimes.
    Another lonely night,
    Is spent here in his arms.
    Sadness comes with first light,
    Because I cannot make him mine.


    I cannot seem to make him mine,
    So I have stopped trying, for quite some time.
    Just another night,
    Is spent here with out him.
    Understanding comes with first light,
    I know he loves you... and not me.
    I cannot make him mine.
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    Jul 22, 2009, 01:48 PM
    That's a great poem!
    I loved it.:):D:)

    I loved your other poem as well.
    Poetry should be your job.

    Good Luck on any other poems you're going to write.

    Joy
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    Jul 22, 2009, 01:59 PM

    Aw! Thank you so much!

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