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    paigerwaiger94 Posts: 87, Reputation: 3
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    #1

    Jun 23, 2009, 06:43 PM
    My new poem
    In memory:
    If I had to go through it again,
    And go through all the pain,
    I would do it in a heartbeat,
    For everything to gain.
    Through all my imperfections,
    You only gave me love,
    Until the day you left me,
    For heaven up above.
    I still feel you with me...
    Still feel you when I wake.
    I still feel the pain,
    Still revel in the heartache.
    You will always be a memory,
    In my mind and in my heart.
    Though your no longer with me,
    Our souls will never part.
    I never got the chance,
    To say how much I cared.
    So this is in memory,
    Of everything we've shared.


    Please tell me what you think.
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    #2

    Jun 24, 2009, 12:28 PM

    This is only the second poem of yours that I've read on here. But I think you've got a lot of talent from the little bit I've gotten to read
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    #3

    Jun 24, 2009, 01:29 PM
    I love it:)
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    Jun 25, 2009, 07:48 AM

    Thank you guys for your comments.
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    #5

    Aug 4, 2009, 10:45 AM

    It's really sad and it made me cry a lot.is it true what u wrote?
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    Aug 4, 2009, 11:04 AM

    Yes, its true.
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    #7

    Aug 6, 2009, 05:54 PM
    That's a very deep poem but its beautiful. Poetry is art and you have ccreated a masterpeice!! Love it. Keep writing :D
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    Aug 7, 2009, 02:18 AM

    Beautiful,very heartfelt and endearing !
    Keep writing ,your emotion comes through beautifully!

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