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    paigerwaiger94 Posts: 87, Reputation: 3
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    #1

    Jul 2, 2009, 08:49 AM
    My new poem
    Now I live among the dead.
    With all the voices in my head,
    Telling me which way to go.
    Saying things I already know.
    I try to leave,
    They scream my name:
    Paige, your dead!
    You can't be saved!
    This I already know to well.
    I look all around me,
    I'm in Hell!
    No one to help,
    No where to turn.
    Their eyes, they scratch,
    Their voices burn.
    Spinning in circles,
    Speared by the pain.
    Forced to cringe,
    When I hear his name.
    Who is this man,
    Known as the king?
    Hope springs up,
    At the promise he brings.
    They say these things,
    They can't be true.
    The things he does,
    No one can do.
    Fighting with the voices in my head.
    Switch to his side,
    Or just stay dead?
    Torn in two,
    Not knowing where to go.
    If it's a lie,
    Everyone will know.
    That Im the traitor,
    That switched sides.
    With nothing left,
    My hope will die.
    Im out of time,
    I have to choose;
    Life or death...
    Win or lose?
    I'll take my chances,
    With the unknown.
    To escape the torchure,
    That has grown.
    You know that man,
    He wasn't a joke.
    Once you know him,
    You'll believe too.
    Once your with Jesus,
    You never lose.


    -Paige.
    Please tell me what you think.
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    MangoPassion Posts: 4, Reputation: 1
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    #2

    Jul 2, 2009, 12:37 PM

    I'm astounded. It's really good!

    I especially like the part:
    Their eyes, they scratch,
    Their voices burn.
    Spinning in circles,
    Speared by the pain.
    Forced to cringe,
    When I hear his name.

    I really felt that!

    Well done - you should be really proud of this :)
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    paigerwaiger94 Posts: 87, Reputation: 3
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    #3

    Jul 2, 2009, 01:29 PM

    Thank you... very much:)

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