[EmoPrincess]

8 pages double spaced 12 pt arial,
What I posted is about 2 pages

[Wondergirl]

You need to do more with explaining the concepts of blood spatters before you get into the case itself.

[justcurious55]

I would go about it a little differently if I were writing it. Start explaining what all of them are. Then late go back and explain how they were each applied to the case, rather than explaining what one is then immediately going into how it was used in that case. Then it will be easier for you to explain the differences in expert opinion. Because clearly the original investigators had a different opinion than those that helped acquit him.

[Wondergirl]

Do you have an outline put together of how you want this paper to flow?

[EmoPrincess]

No, and because of the format we have to follow, we have to follow a three part thesis. Or I get 0 points for the whole thing

[Wondergirl]

What are the three parts of the thesis? (very briefly)

[EmoPrincess]

The three divisions of the blood spatter

Our thesis had to be like this

Main topic is/does/was/by/etc blank, blank, and blank

[Wondergirl]

Your last line makes no sense to me. So the paper has to be on the blood spatters only? What about starting with general info about the forensics of blood spatters? I used the word "forensics" in my Google searches on blood spatters and came up with a number of legit sites. (Justcurious is right on the ball.)

[EmoPrincess]

Sorry, that's how the teachers at my school explain it.

It's the main topic, then three supports

Mine is three types of blood spatter

[Wondergirl]

sorry, that's how the teachers at my school explain it.

it's the main topic, then three supports

mine is three types of blood spatter

Wish I'd been in class with you...

So start with generalities about blood spatters, the forensics of each, then go into the specifics of the case. You should be able to get enough pages with no problem.

[EmoPrincess]

Perhaps I should take out the whole thing about the case and just do it on blood spatter, I figured I'd leave it as tying into the case since I already wrote something about it, but it turns out to be limiting what I write.

[Wondergirl]

perhaps I should take out the whole thing about the case and just do it on blood spatter, I figured I'd leave it as tying into the case since I already wrote something about it, but it turns out to be limiting what I write.

Not necessarily. The case is the specific, the practical application of the forensics. If you had time, you could include other cases as specific examples.

[EmoPrincess]

Unfortunately I haven't time, thank you procrastination

[Wondergirl]

Unfortunately I haven't time, thank you procrastination

I was a procrastinator long before you were ha ha. Was this topic your choice or your instructor's?

[EmoPrincess]

Mine, well blood spatter was. But I have to (in annoying teacher mock voice) "narrow it down"

[Wondergirl]

Choose a type of wound -- head wound is the obvious one.

[EmoPrincess]

In relation to what?

[Wondergirl]

in relation to what?

Um, the source of the blood. Bashing on someone's head produces amazing blood spatters that reveal all sorts of stuff.

[EmoPrincess]

Good idea WG now I just need to figure out how to make that into a three part thesis

[Wondergirl]

Good idea WG now I just need to figure out how to make that into a three part thesis

The thesis statement or topic sentence could be "The blood spatters from a head wound tell a fascinating tale to the criminal investigator who is willing to take the time to analyze them."