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Torrid13 · Jul 30, 2009, 09:38 PM

It started on the day you
hollowed out your bones, in hopes to fly
and I wore my concrete shoes
because I’ve always quite preferred the ground.

You told me I have never possessed enough backbone
conveniently forgetting the times you unzipped my skin
and stole my strength away
but I continue to sit in the dirt and draw pictures with sticks
ones where you were a demon and I was an angel
we loved each other anyway.

Or perhaps I was the demon and you were the angel.
I can never remember.

It started on the day I became a picket fence
white and dainty, safe from dogs and horses
but not from swift fingers and feet that were intent on penetrating my yard.

You told me, as you flew away
that you were always destined for greatness, and I, failure
so me and my concrete shoes laid our hearts at the bottom of the riverbed
your lips eating clouds.

Or perhaps I was the one who ate clouds
and you were the one who was dead in the water.

I can never remember.

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Like the name of it? That's the actually name of this piece. Hence the username. :)

This is one of the poems from my new book entitled "The Weather Near the Atlantic."
This is from Part One: Overcast.

I am posting this in celebration of the fact that a fan in Australia would like to purchase copies of all 6 of my poetry books for a hefty fee, and would like me to autograph and personalize all of them!

Yay, success! :)

PS: This is not the original structure of this piece. It has been altered due to AMHD.

friend4u178 · Jul 30, 2009, 09:43 PM

I like it Torri :)

Good job

Torrid13 · Jul 30, 2009, 09:47 PM

Thank you, M! :)

It's not my best, but I thought it would be a good one since my name is Torrid. >:3

BlackVY · Jul 30, 2009, 10:02 PM

Wow... nice work Baby Torrie... impressive...

Keep it up... :)

Torrid13 · Jul 30, 2009, 10:10 PM

Thank you Blacky!

Baby Torrie has been writing since she was a baby! 1st grade, to be exact. :)

BlackVY · Jul 30, 2009, 10:14 PM

Originally Posted by Torrid13

Thank you Blacky!

Baby Torrie has been writing since she was a baby! 1st grade, to be exact. :)

Wow! That's great, starting young is always good. Nice to see you have improved, I'm hoping. I'm sure your folks have encouraged you along the way, so that's cool.

roxypox · Jul 31, 2009, 05:41 AM

Good job Torrid ;)

Unknown008 · Jul 31, 2009, 08:16 AM

Way to go Torri! :)

Torrid13 · Jul 31, 2009, 10:17 AM

Thank you guys!

I'm hoping this is just the beginning of my big literary break! :)

roxypox · Aug 1, 2009, 03:00 AM

It isn't impossible! It seems that this is something your working hard towards and to be out there and promoting yourself is a good idea. :) it's pretty cool though to get an order like that by the way ;)