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  • Jul 28, 2009, 11:59 AM
    Chey5782
    Oh Jenni, here's one for you.
    Here jenni, you posted some so I thought I would return the favor. Tear it up, I don't really care about criticism, I know it's good enough for me :rolleyes:


    Dancing


    Your fingertips

    Your tongue

    Razors edge.

    Cut me.

    Flesh, spirit, and soul.

    Unceremoniously,

    We dance in the light.

    I, wishing to be a Bodhisattva.

    You, a hero.

    Whispering words that fall,

    Like cobwebs and blood drops.

    We paint, the world around us,

    With the footsteps left behind.
  • Aug 1, 2009, 03:31 AM
    roxypox

    I know you don't care about critism, but I'd love to say I Like it though ;)
  • Aug 1, 2009, 03:43 AM
    artlady

    You had me at we paint! Actually you had me before that. You had me at fingertips. Cool
    Maybe I will put one of mine up for shi$s and giggles :)
    I like it,painful ,intense and strong!

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