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  • Apr 10, 2009, 09:58 AM
    jeffrey michael
    Its Hard To Say Goodbye ! ( input welcome )
    My light has turned to dark.

    My Soul has lost its spark.

    My Love has left me empty.

    Its more than I dreamt it would be.

    So overwhelming with pain.

    With my tears falling like rain.

    Despair has set in for good.

    There is no Hope that I could.

    Ever get you back in my arms.

    I have done no good only harm.

    I wish you would just stay and never go.

    But I have no choice but to let you grow.

    You're my wants my needs the reason I breath.

    Now Im alone and dying with no light left seen.

    I will always have you, but only in my dreams.

    Holding you close as I see your face beam.

    Now I just reach for you at night wishing you were there.

    Alone I lay here for your voice I want to hear.

    For one last kiss, a touch, a smile.

    Just to see you again if only for a while.

    This is all I have to give.

    Without you I will just not be able to Live.

    As I wipe my face filled with tears from my eyes.

    This is the hardest thing to say to you, " Goodbye "




    JMT
  • Apr 15, 2009, 08:59 AM
    OwlM

    Well its your feelings so I cannot judge them, only can say if it helps don't stop. But don't see real question here, but be sure your thoughts are now immortal.
    Lol
  • Apr 15, 2009, 09:04 AM
    Wondergirl

    My opinion - the forced rhyming takes away from the emotion of the poem. Turning it into free verse might work better (keeping most of the words).

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