How would I revise this sentence

It was a blistering June day; the heat could be seen radiating from the pavement.

I'll help you, but you have to show some initiative.

How do you think you could revise it?

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Doublea1126 disagrees: it sucked

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It sucked because I am not going to do your homework for you. I have already done mine it is your turn.

Please refer to this Announcement regarding homework.

Now, I am willing to help, but nobody here will do it for you.