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  • Aug 26, 2007, 12:49 PM
    sportzislifesarah92
    A song I wrote.
    OK so I wrote this song when my great grandma died. Like a year ago. I'm 14 years old. Its not really a whole song together, more just like a verse and then a chorus and that's it. I was wondering if it is good or not?! So here it is:

    You know I've been down that road before,
    And never want to go back.
    Maybe 'cause I don't want to face,
    The cold hard facts.
    I've always had someone to lean on,
    Somebody to catch me when I fell,
    And that someone was you,
    But then you fell down as well.

    You know I need you,
    You know I want you.
    But the time has come to realize,
    Don't you see?
    Your in a better place,
    And always with me.
    And when the day is done I have to smile,
    'cause I know your there...

    Hold'n my hand,
    Write'n a letter,
    Singing a song to make me sleep,
    Thinking all the time,
    Fight'in all my battles,
    Helping me get through it.
    And then I see you shining face,
    And I know your there,
    Praying my prayer.

    It doesn't really make a whole lot of sense but to me it does. I want the truth. Don't say ohh its so good and you really think its bad. I want to know. My dream is to become a singer/song writer. And hearing what you think will help me. So let me know.
  • Aug 26, 2007, 12:59 PM
    Clough
    I think that it is very touching and obviously written from your heart. You have done an excellent job! Please keep practicing writing songs because I think that you could be excellent at doing that.

    I am a professional musician in the entertainment industry.

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