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Is there anything wrong with this sentence?

I am writing down my thoughts on a past event. I've to describe the event by transitioning to past and I got struck with this.

Is this a right decision? Am I rightly judging my ability?

Since this is something about past. Should I modify it as:

Was this a right decision? Was I rightly judging my ability?

Or if there is any other better form of this, please let me know.

I would probably write it like this...

"Was that the right decision? Am/Was I judging my my abilities correctly?" (Or just "ability" as you had...

It's really about personal preference... If I were the person writing this... journal entry?. I would go with "Was" and "abilities"... But that's because of the way I write... To each their own. ;-)

Well, if you are thinking in the present tense, "is" would be correct. If you are ruminating on what you were thinking in the past, "was" works. It's six of one and half dozen of the other.

Is the a context or larger text this fits into?

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

Well, if you are thinking in the present tense, "is" would be correct. If you are ruminating on what you were thinking in the past, "was" works. It's six of one and half dozen of the other.

Is the a context or larger text this fits into?

I'm actually writing an admission essay evaluating an ethical dilemma I had faced a few months ago. So, I have to ruminate on something which happened earlier.

If it is a narrative and you quote in italics what you were thinking at the time, then "is." Like this --

My cat seemed to be quite ill. He was listless and refused to eat and drink. What am I to do? I have no money for a vet, but my sweet cat needs to be seen by one. I wonder if my neighbor will lend me enough and will trust me to pay her back. I decided to call the vet and make an appointment.

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I would probably write it like this...

"Was that the right decision? Am/Was I judging my my abilities correctly?" (Or just "ability" as you had...

It's really about personal preference... If I were the person writing this... journal entry?... I would go with "Was" and "abilities"... But that's because of the way I write... To each their own. ;-)

Its not a journal entry, though. Its an admission essay.

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

If it is a narrative and you quote in italics what you were thinking at the time, then "is." Like this --

My cat seemed to be quite ill. He was listless and refused to eat and drink. What am I to do? I have no money for a vet, but my sweet cat needs to be seen by one. I wonder if my neighbor will lend me enough and will trust me to pay her back. I decided to call the vet and make an appointment.

Here it is. Can I go with it then?

I knew that this rank wasn't going to get me the major I intended and I was right. I was offered to pursue bio-chemical engineering at IIT-Varanasi.

I was pretty depressed. I wanted to give it another try because I want my path to be chosen by me, not by fate. But is this a right decision? Am I rightly judging my ability? To this day, I still weigh the ethical dilemma of my career decision.

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Here it is. Can I go with it then?

I knew that this rank wasn't going to get me the major I intended and I was right. I was offered to pursue bio-chemical engineering at IIT-Varanasi.

I was pretty depressed. I wanted to give it another try because I want my path to be chosen by me, not by fate. But is this a right decision? Am I rightly judging my ability? To this day, I still weigh the ethical dilemma of my career decision.

Do it this way --

I knew that this rank wasn't going to get me the major I intended and I was right. I was offered to pursue bio-chemical engineering at IIT-Varanasi.

I was pretty depressed. I wanted to give it another try because I wanted my path to be chosen by me, not by fate. But is this a right decision? I wondered. Am I rightly judging my ability? To this day, I still weigh the ethical dilemma of my career decision.

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

Do it this way --

I knew that this rank wasn't going to get me the major I intended and I was right. I was offered to pursue bio-chemical engineering at IIT-Varanasi.

I was pretty depressed. I wanted to give it another try because I want my path to be chosen by me, not by fate. But is this a right decision? I wondered. Am I rightly judging my ability? To this day, I still weigh the ethical dilemma of my career decision.

Thank you so much. It does seem quite complete now. If you don't mind, can u check an extract from another paragraph?

Sure. Please post it.

This decision made me realize that important decisions in life are often difficult to make. I reckon that I’ve made a good one and hope to make such in future. Spending one year waiting for “my moment” has also given me patience and an increased tenacity that I will carry forward into other areas of my life.

Are there any mistakes or changes to be made? The first sentence, I think, looks like a cliché. Should I change it?

Do I sound like a braggart if I change the second sentence to:

I reckon that I've mede a good one, though.

Oh, its "made" and not "mede"

I have come to realize that important decisions in life are often difficult to make. I reckon that I’ve made a good one and will make more in the future. Waiting a whole year for “my moment” has also given me patience and an increased tenacity that I will carry forward into other areas of my life.

I don't understand the use of "reckon."

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

I have come to realize that important decisions in life are often difficult to make. I reckon that I’ve made a good one and will make more in the future. Waiting a whole year for “my moment” has also given me patience and an increased tenacity that I will carry forward into other areas of my life.

I don't understand the use of "reckon."

I've rejected an admission offer last May because I didn't get my intended major. I have to attend the same exam in coming April. So, How can I be sure that I've made a good decision? This made me use "reckon" as I believe it to be a good decision.

"Reckon" sounds like an American cowboy.

I'm confident that

I'm sure that

I'm comfortable with

I was afraid that I may sound like an egoist or braggart, rambling about my great decision-making skills. So, I didn't use "confident" or "sure". Do you think using any of these words wouldn't work against me?

I knew that this rank wasn't going to get me the major I wanted, and I was right. I was invited to pursue bio-chemical engineering at IIT-Varanasi.

I was pretty depressed. I wanted to give it another try because I wanted my path to be chosen by me, not by fate. But is this a right decision? I wondered. Am I rightly judging my ability? To this day, I still weigh the ethical dilemma of my career decision.

I have come to realize that important decisions in life are often difficult to make. I'm confident that I've made a good one this time--and, remembering this experience, I will make more good ones in the future. Waiting a whole year for “my moment” has also given me patience and an increased tenacity that I will carry forward into other areas of my life.

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Originally Posted by Abhimanyu Pudi

I was afraid that I may sound like an egoist or braggart, rambling about my great decision-making skills. So, I didn't use "confident" or "sure". Do you think using any of these words wouldn't work against me?

If you were a male, you wouldn't hesitate. At this level of education, one doesn't wimp out.

Wow!! Now, that never speaks as a braggart!

You are really wonderful as in your name. Thank you so much. You've also given me a lot of confidence which I really need at this point of time. Thank you.

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Originally Posted by Abhimanyu Pudi

Wow!! Now, that never speaks as a braggart!

We women need to appreciate who we are and what we have to contribute.

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You are really wonderful as in your name. Thank you so much. You've also given me a lot of confidence which I really need at this point of time. Thank you.

"Wondergirl" means, as a librarian, I wonder a lot -- poor choice of a user name since people think I want to be Supergirl. My usual user name on other sites is CeeBee. I should have registered with that here too.

I'm glad I could help! :)

FINAL --

I knew that this rank wasn't going to get me the major I wanted, and I was right. I was invited to pursue bio-chemical engineering at IIT-Varanasi.

I was pretty depressed. I wanted to give it another try because I wanted my path to be chosen by me, not by fate. But is this a right decision? I wondered. Am I rightly judging my ability? To this day, I still weigh the ethical dilemma of my career decision.

I have come to realize that important decisions in life are often difficult to make. I'm confident that I’ve made a good one this time--and, remembering this experience, I will make more good ones in the future. Waiting a whole year for “my moment” has also given me patience and an increased tenacity that I will carry forward into other areas of my life.

Yes that is final and will not be changed.

By the way, how can I spread your reputation now?

Thank you, but no need. Just tell all your friends about us. And send me a dozen samosas and some mango chutney. ;)

Hahaha! You know something, I have, already, told a friend about you. I've seen your rescue missions on this site many times!

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Hahaha!! You know something, I have, already, told a friend about you. I've seen your rescue missions on this site many times!!

Rescue missions?

Correcting grammar and you did give an excellent explanation on a metaphor few years ago. I guess.
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He is switzerland

Do you remember?

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Originally Posted by Abhimanyu Pudi

Correcting grammar and you did give an excellent explanation on a metaphor few years ago. i guess.

Do you remember?

Nope. I don't. I like to edit people's writing (and my own).

Now I feel like showing you my whole essay but is it okay if I post it here? Firstly, are you interested in editing it?

I made my first post asking to correct my sentence in education category and I tried to get you into it, but I failed. This time, expecting you, I've posted it in writing section.

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Originally Posted by Abhimanyu Pudi

Now I feel like showing you my whole essay but is it okay if I post it here? Firstly, are you interested in editing it?

Yes, you can post it here, or maybe safer to PM it to me (so not plagiarized). May I edit it in the morning? It's 1:30 a.m. here now and I should go to bed.

I just looked up the Switzerland metaphor -- back in September 2008!! I can't escape my history!

There you go. You must be smiling when you looked at it now.

Yes, sure. I'll be waiting and GOOD NIGHT

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Originally Posted by Abhimanyu Pudi

I made my first post asking to correct my sentence in education category and i tried to get you into it, but I failed. This time, expecting you, I've posted it in writing section.

Universities & Colleges is not one of my boards, but Writing is, so I check it several times a day and have it on my virtual bulletin board. I saw your plea for help when I went looking for Switzerland.

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There you go. You must be smiling when you looked at it now.

Yes, sure. I'll be waiting and GOOD NIGHT

Have a good day. See you in a while. (We're 10 hrs. apart. I'll be here again around 9 a.m. my time)

And just a sec. What is PM?

Its okay, lets come back tomorrow morning(morning to you, though)

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And just a sec. What is PM?

Its okay, lets come back tomorrow morning(morning to you, though)

PM = Private Message.

Click on my name by my avatar and a window will open showing a link to the PM screen.