[andyhaus1057]

I need to tell a few sentences about the Cyclone of 1896, include the number of people who died, where it striked at, and also if the cyclone struck today as it did in 1896, what would be the consequences?

Here is what I have. Can you please help me edit it so that it meets the requirements?

The tornado first hit the ground along a ridge in the southwest portion of the city, near the St. Louis State Hospital ("City Hospital"). It next went along Jefferson avenue, through Lafayette Park to Seventh and Rutger streets. Then it moved on towards Soulard and the levee before crossing the river on towards East St. Louis in Illinois. In its wake, the storm left at least 138 dead in St. Louis, another 118 in East St. Louis. Approximately 85 persons were missing in St. Louis and over one hundred more missing on the east-side. Many of those listed as missing were certainly killed and their bodies either carried away by the wind or by the river, with little hope that the bodies will be recovered. Over a thousand residents were physically injured. The "Cyclone of 1896" has been described as the single most deadly event that hit the St. Louis area in recorded history. In little over fifteen minutes the storm fully completed its course of death and destruction. 315 bodies found. Over 8,800 buildings were destroyed or damaged. Homes, churches, trees, fences and park facilities were uprooted or destroyed. Elsewhere in the city, Eads Bridge lost 300 feet of its eastern approach, the City Hospital was badly damaged, gas lines cut, electric service knocked out, trees uprooted, power plants ruined, street cars overturned, steamboats along the levee sunk. It was even reported that RR cars were blown from their tracks over on the East side. The sounds of roofs crashing to the ground was described as an "explosion of a hundred cannons". Property carried away by the tornado have been found as far away as Vandalia, Illinois. An estimated cost of over 10 million dollars.


The first significant tornado of the day formed near Bellflower, Missouri and killed a woman. Three students died and sixteen were injured when the Dye School in Audrain County, Missouri was hit at around 6:15 P.M. The same tornado killed one student and injured 19 others at the Bean Creek school a few minutes later. At 6:30, two supercell thunderstorms produced two tornadoes. One decimated farms in New Minden, Hoyleton, Richview, and Irvington, Illinois.

Twenty-seven more people died in the other Illinois tornadoes of this outbreak.


The tornado spawned from the other supercell became the third deadliest and the most costly tornado in United States history. It touched down in St. Louis, Missouri, then one of the largest and most influential cities in the country. 137 people died as the tornado traversed the core of the city leaving a mile wide (1.6 km) continuous swath of destroyed homes, schools, saloons, factories, mills, churches, parks, and railroad yards. More people probably died on boats on the Mississippi River as the bodies may have gone downriver. When the tornado crossed the river and hit East Saint Louis, Illinois, it was smaller but more intense. An additional 118 people were killed. The confirmed death toll is 255, with some estimates above 400. More than 1,000 were injured. The tornado was later rated F4 on the Fujita scale. Adjusted for wealth and inflation (1997 USD), it is the costliest tornado in U.S. history at an estimated $2.9 billion. Enough damage was done to the city that there was some question that St. Louis might not be able to host the 1896 Republican National Convention in June.


It is somewhat rare for the core of a large city to be hit directly by a tornado (due to their relatively small area and the relative lack of large cities in the highest tornado threat region)--especially a large intense tornado--yet several other tornadoes have tracked through the City of St. Louis and several of these tornadoes were also very deadly and destructive. Among these events are: 1871 (9 killed), 1890 (4 killed), 1904 (3 killed, 100 injured), 1927 (79 killed, 550 injured, 2nd costliest in US history), and 1959 (21 killed, 345 injured). This makes St. Louis the worst tornado afflicted urban area in the U.S. Additionally, the Greater St. Louis area is the scene of even more historically destructive and deadly tornadoes.

[Clough]

Hi, andyhaus1057!

I hope that you haven't handed in your paper yet!

In the quote below, are some suggested revisions for you highlighted in red. Overall, I think that what you have written is pretty good. However, it does seem to be a bit wordy and the organization could probably use some further work.

Thanks!

I need to tell a few sentences about the Cyclone of 1896, include the number of people who died, where it struck, and also if the cyclone struck today as it did in 1896, what would be the consequences?

Here is what I have. Can you please help me edit it so that it meets the requirements?

[What's your title going to be? I'm presuming that you're going to need to have one.]

[Also, are you gong to cite your sources?]

The tornado first hit the ground along a ridge in the southwest portion of the city, near the St. Louis State Hospital ("City Hospital"). It next went along Jefferson avenue, through Lafayette Park to Seventh and Rutger streets. Then it moved on toward Soulard and the levee before crossing the river on toward East St. Louis in Illinois.

In its wake, the storm left at least 138 dead in St. Louis, another 118 in East St. Louis. Approximately 85 persons were missing in St. Louis and over one hundred more missing on the east-side. Many of those listed as missing were certainly killed and their bodies either carried away by the wind or by the river, with little hope that the bodies would ever be recovered. Over a thousand residents were physically injured.

[I would move this and the next paragraph to the beginning.] The "Cyclone of 1896" has been described as the single most deadly event that hit the St. Louis area in recorded history. In little over fifteen minutes the storm fully completed its course of death and destruction. 315 bodies found. Over 8,800 buildings were destroyed or damaged. Homes, churches, trees, fences and park facilities were uprooted or destroyed. Elsewhere in the city, Eads Bridge lost 300 feet of its eastern approach, the City Hospital was badly damaged, gas lines cut, electric service knocked out, trees uprooted, power plants ruined, street cars overturned, steamboats along the levee sunk.

It was even reported that railroad cars were blown from their tracks over on the East side. The sounds of roofs crashing to the ground was described as an "explosion of a hundred cannons". Property carried away by the tornado have been found as far away as Vandalia, Illinois. An estimated cost of over 10 million dollars.

The first significant tornado of the day formed near Bellflower, Missouri and killed a woman. Three students died and sixteen were injured when the Dye School in Audrain County, Missouri was hit at around 6:15 P.M. The same tornado killed one student and injured 19 others at the Bean Creek school a few minutes later. At 6:30, two super cells thunderstorms produced two tornadoes. One decimated farms in New Minden, Hoyleton, Richview, and Irvington, Illinois. Twenty-seven more people died in the other Illinois tornadoes as a result of this outbreak.

The tornado spawned from the other super cell became the third deadliest and the most costly tornado in the history of the United States. It touched down in St. Louis, Missouri, then one of the largest and most influential cities in the country. 137 people died as the tornado traversed the core of the city leaving a mile wide (1.6 km) continuous swath of destroyed homes, schools, saloons, factories, mills, churches, parks, and railroad yards. More people probably died on boats on the Mississippi River as the bodies may have gone downriver.

When the tornado crossed the river and hit East Saint Louis, Illinois, it was smaller but more intense. An additional 118 people were killed. The confirmed death toll is 255, with some estimates above 400. More than 1,000 were injured. The tornado was later rated F4 on the Fujita scale. Adjusted for wealth and inflation (1997 USDA?), it is the costliest tornado in U.S. history at an estimated $2.9 billion. Enough damage was done to the city that there was some question that St. Louis might not be able to host the 1896 Republican National Convention in June.

It is somewhat rare for the core of a large city to be hit directly by a tornado (due to their relatively small area and the relative lack of large cities in the highest tornado threat region)--especially a large, intense tornado--yet several other tornadoes have tracked through the City of St. Louis and several of these tornadoes were also very deadly and destructive. Among these events are: 1871 (9 killed), 1890 (4 killed), 1904 (3 killed, 100 injured), 1927 (79 killed, 550 injured, 2nd costliest in US history), and 1959 (21 killed, 345 injured). This makes St. Louis the worst tornado afflicted urban area in the U.S. Additionally, the Greater St. Louis area is the scene of even more historically destructive and deadly tornadoes.

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I didn't get any feedback on my efforts above, andyhaus1057, as to whether what I posted was helpful or not. Would appreciate getting some feedback from you.

Thanks!

[andyhaus1057]

I didn't get any feedback on my efforts above, andyhaus1057, as to whether what I posted was helpful or not. Would appreciate getting some feedback from you.

Thanks!

:) You did a great job, thank you so much.. I will be sure to give you a 5 star rating. In the mean time, though...

I have to do 3 papers... 1 on the Steroid Scandal, 1 on Mark McGwire's steroid discussion, and 1 on Mark McGwire's baseball career.
This one is on Mark McGwire's career, and below is the requirements that need to be met... Can you help me meet them?

Must be 1-2 pages
1) Identification of the article
Includes: Subject, Article title, Author, Web site address, date and page number(s)

2) Summary of Article
In my own words, state the author's main point(s) use data and direct quotes from the article to support the points, and refer to the author by name, or in the third person point of view ("He, "She").
3) Application to my research study
How does this article apply to my research topic and Thesis statement. Refer to myself or group member in the first person point of view ("I" or "We").


4) Opinion
Do I agree or disagree with the author? How do I think my opinion may affect my research study? That is, what personal biases do I have regarding my research topic? How will this sway my research?



Mark McGwire’s baseball career
St. Louis Cardinal first baseman Mark McGwire was one of the most fearsome power hitters in baseball in the 1990s. McGwire was the first player to break Roger Maris's 1961 record of 61 home runs in a single season; he set the new mark by hitting 70 homers in 1998. (Chicago Cub star Sammy Sosa hit 66 homers the same year.) The next year McGwire became the 17th player to hit 500 home runs or more in a career, joining Babe Ruth and Mickey Mantle, among others. McGwire played his first major league game in 1986 and was a star for the Oakland Athletics when they won the 1989 World Series. Injuries and a hitting slump slowed him down in the early 1990s, but by 1995 he was suddenly bigger and stronger and hitting the ball out of the park again.
In July of 1997 he was traded to St. Louis , where he became one of baseball's biggest draws. The 1998 back-and-forth home run contest with Sosa captivated the public's attention and McGwire became a celebrity beyond the ballpark. After a season of more injuries, he announced his retirement from professional baseball in November of 2001.
In 2005 he was called as a witness in congressional hearings on steroid abuse in major league baseball. McGwire's refusal to answer questions about his own history caused a stir, and he took a beating in the press. McGwire's single-season record was broken by Barry Bonds, who hit 73 homers during the 2001 season. McGwire batted right-handed and wore #25. McGwire played for the 1984 U.S. Olympic team. He founded the Mark McGwire Foundation for Children, which supports agencies that work with child-abuse victims.

Sources: Mark McGwire's Hall of Fame Worthiness -- The Hardball Times
Cooperstown Bound? - Mark McGwire - National Pastime - Washington Times - Politics, Breaking News, US and World News
Mark McGwire - Biography of Mark McGwire