[Unrequitedlove]

I wrote this last night about my friend I'm falling for and I'm sure feels something for me too. She tells me that the way I'm so easily entertained makes her happy and she asked where have I been all her life. I know she is the kind of girl that finds poetry and other such writings cute. I am not sure if I should give this to her yet I want a few other opinions. Let me know what you think, like and dislike.

She has a way of making me forget everything and my only existing focus is on her. She is good natured and fun-loving.Her personality bubbles and floods out of her, washing me away in her tides of silliness and all around adorableness. She has a comforting, gentle look in the way her soft cheeks perch a top her dazzling smile and her hypnotically beautiful eyes entice me and relentlessly hold on. Her presence puts me at ease yet makes me the most uncomfortable I've ever been; I relish it. Her playfulness forces a smile out of me and leaves me in blissful disorientation. She hasn't left my thoughts for weeks, not for a moment. I am hopelessly fixated on this paragon of perfection and beauty. Her appearance is that of a truly gorgeous and mature women but her childish playfulness is what makes her the most attractive. She treats me like a man yet they way she makes me feel emasculates me; I love it. She makes me feel and think about things guys would be ashamed to admit to. I am horrified that she is just a wishful dream; how can everything I find attractive be woven into just one immaculate tapestry. She must have a hint of how her beauty transcends the definition given by man. She truly is unique. When I look at her I see a genuinely sweet and gorgeous woman who can completely own me with a smile. I have found the girl of my dreams and my every waking thought.

[thadevilsadvocate]

In my lifetime, I have experienced, that most women will appreciate a man that takes the time to craft something that they have written/created with their own hands and feelings. You don't need our advice to say whether she will like this, for she is her own person. I'm sure she will love the fact that you took the time to create something specifically for and about her.

[Wondergirl]

It's beautiful!

Is using "she" a good way to refer to her? Why did you write it that way? End it with "She is you" or some such idea?

[mmresd]

Well-written, just spell check it and basic proof read.

Good Luck,
Javi