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How is my new poem? Wrote it in 4 minutes
Some haze sorrounds my eyes always
When stars twinkle in a hazy sky, My eyes strain to see them shining more bright… When the moon appears in half its glory, I yearn to see him in his fully gleaming in his own light… When the raindrops touch mother earth softly, I yearn to feel the rays of sun in all their might… When the trees shed their leaves to renew themselves, I yearn to see them glowing green in every day’s twilight…. Why is it that I fail to see and admire beauty as it is, Why I fail to enjoy the different facets of nature in my desire to see something that isn’t there always…. Might be it’s a well thought out thought when a wise man wisely said, That beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder, if not, you rue your very plight…. ------------------------------------------------------Giri |
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Hi again, Giri!
Below is a possible refining of your poem. I hope that you don't mind!
Some Haze Surrounds My Eyes Always
When stars twinkle in a hazy sky, My eyes strain to see them shining more bright… When the moon appears in half its glory, I yearn to see him fully gleaming in his own light… When the raindrops touch mother earth softly, I yearn to feel the rays of sun in all their might… When the trees shed their leaves to renew themselves, I yearn to see them glowing green in every day’s twilight…. Why is it that I fail to see and admire beauty as it is, Why I fail to enjoy the different facets of nature in my desire to see something that isn’t there always…. Might be it’s a well thought out thought when a wise man wisely said, That beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder, if not, you rue your very plight…. Thanks! |
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