[drinkmenow8]

What makes a professional song writer I need some critiques

Some pointers, tips, etc.

Maybe even just some feedback.

I woke up today
Stayed in bed past noon
My memories are haunting
Me in my room

I look to my nails which
Are chewed to the bone
As thoughts keep running through
My head of returning home

Why do I have to go
Against the grain
It rubs at my flesh
Just a mild pain

I cannot leave here
Until I prove one point
Its not in my head but
Its not in my head
alt. verse

Why look at me with that awkward eye
Yes please miss I would like to buy
A cure for this common condition
Do you think waldo hid
In fear of submission

Chorus

Its just that... its just that
Could I save this city
Its just that... its just that
Do you deserve what I can offer
Its just that... its just that
Success will be my revenge..

What's the difference
Between right and wrong
One mans fortune
Is another mans song

What do you know in
Such a big place
You've got so many choices
That you have to make

Nothing I've done yet
Has stood the test of time
But no one could change me
At the drop of a dime

I still question things I've done
But at the top
You will stand
In the heavens as one

Alt verse
I see the anger in your eye
So sad you lost your golden prize
But that's okay because I'm doing just fine
Now watch my views w/ stand the
Test of time

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[ty_cohen]

Well honestly, I really like it. The emotion is there and that makes for a good song. I don't think you have anything to worry about! Congratulations!