[Thoroski]

Im 11 years, so can you tell me what you like about this rap and tell me what I should improve about it. Thanks:)



Lets Take a look at myself
Stand 5’4 about the same height as two double elf
1st well start wit da curly hair
Its like it gotten screwed up by a bear
But Just because the s out control doenst mean it should be as a scare
Next you look down and there's the two bulging eyes
If you take a deep look you’ll reliaze this isn't lies
Peer down, aiyo you'll notice my beauty mark, also known as my mole
This Brown thing’s as a round as a damn bowl
Obvisily below that is da mouth, but nothing special about that
So lets move down south



Now that we've coverd the face
Its now time to pick up the pace
Next comes my upper body
Where my pipes are as fly as a tody
Don’t mess wit the face or it’ll start to get rodie
Keep on heading further down
And you'll witness my hands
But man, for that heads up if youmess with me they’ll transform into the bad lands
Move back up then around and down
You’ll find yuour self at my gut
There's nothing exciting around here
So lets get out in lickety cut
Wait go a bit lower then that
Cuz if I mention that part
It wouldn’t be to smart
Now what's this, it’s the legs, that are really hairy
But ahah they remind me of the big foot, but he's more scarey
Now here we are we've reached the end of our journey
Were at da feet, but let me remind you there not that sweet
Despite from neat
Buh one more time let me repeat this beat

[BlackRose24]

Ummm... yeah there's really for me no words that can descibe that rap