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  • Jun 29, 2012, 02:59 PM
    Wondergirl
    Okay. Post the last two.
  • Jun 29, 2012, 03:01 PM
    jakesmith
    Help
  • Jun 29, 2012, 03:19 PM
    Wondergirl
    Going to my cousin's wedding was an wonderful experience in learning about my culture's celebrations of weddings. In a traditional wedding in India, the bride and groom are the result of an arranged marriage. The wedding last four days, and each day there is a different ceremony. Each ceremony has a different meaning for the marrying couple. A wedding in India is not just about two people, but is between two families. I still remember that day when my cousin had his first meeting with his future wife in the presence of her family members at my house. Once both families agreed to the marriage, they fixed the date for the wedding. There are also numerous rituals and ceremonies performed before and during the wedding. First, there is an engagement with a ring given, then there is a pre-wedding ceremony that involves an oral agreement between the two families. There is the "mehendi" ceremony where the bride and all the bride's friends and relatives gather together to have henna drawn on their hands--patterns of beautiful designs and the groom's name. After they have the "sanget" where guests invited by both the bride's and groom’s families, they gather to play "garba," the traditional folk dance form. The majority of the wedding ceremony will take place in "man-dap" where the bride and groom sit, where the priest says the spiritual vows or "mantras" from the Vedas.

    Living in India is nothing compared to where I live in Florida. Living in the United State of America is nothing to compared to India where people don’t have a/c in their houses or have modern houses. There are no traffic lights on the streets unless it’s a big city, so there are traffic jams every day. The household consists of at least six or more people living under one roof because the parents live with the kids and grandkids to make one family united. Animals are all over the streets and around the homes. Some of the animals die of starvation or have some type of disease. Poverty in India is profound and very obvious! I never stopped noticing. Everywhere my sibling, parents, and I went there was someone begging for food or money. I always gave money, and never wanted to think of someone starving to death. It really stood out in my mind, the huge population and poverty level in India. I learned to be grateful for everything God has given me. There were thousands upon thousands of beggars living on the sidewalks and streets, kids with no clothes or food, women with torn clothes, men with long beards and no shirts, just pants on--all trying to find money to feed themselves. I was horrified to see this bad poverty and filthiness. I encountered more garbage and filth there than I could have ever imagined.
  • Jun 29, 2012, 03:20 PM
    Wondergirl
    Check over the wedding part especially. I may have not understood how you wanted to say that section. I think the rest is okay with a few changes I made.
  • Jun 29, 2012, 03:22 PM
    jakesmith
    Quote:

    Originally Posted by Wondergirl View Post
    Check over the wedding part especially. I may have not understood how you wanted to say that section. I think the rest is okay with a few changes I made.

    Change the whole wedding paragraph
  • Jun 29, 2012, 03:24 PM
    jakesmith
    Kkkk
  • Jun 29, 2012, 03:51 PM
    ScottGem
    Why did you edit your posts after WG so graciously helped you? And then report the posts?

    Were you afraid your teachers would find these posts and know you got help?
  • Jun 29, 2012, 04:03 PM
    Wondergirl
    He did most of the work, and I edited based on my memories of Indian coworkers' weddings.
  • Jun 29, 2012, 04:38 PM
    ScottGem
    Quote:

    Originally Posted by Wondergirl View Post
    He did most of the work, and I edited based on my memories of Indian coworkers' weddings.


    I agree, which is why his editing the posts and reporting them is puzzling.
  • Jun 29, 2012, 04:48 PM
    Wondergirl
    Quote:

    Originally Posted by ScottGem View Post
    I agree, which is why his editing the posts and reporting them is puzzling.

    Guess what I will do the next time someone needs help editing. Go wild with your imagination.

    I got similar treatment the other day when I asked "too many questions" and "didn't do the correcting."

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