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  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:15 PM
    Sodium
    I Wrote A poem, friends say its good, is it?
    okay so i wrote a poem and all my frends say they REALLY like it.....And im really not sure about it, but im really proud, Is IT GOOD?


    look into Her happy life,
    She Finally picks Up the Knife.

    Sadness hidden behind her smile
    Let it out, its been a while

    husband yells and hits her twice,
    if only he would treat her nice.

    This time she runs and tries to fight
    Holding The kinfe, Gripped tight.

    With one more thrust it will all be done
    Then She'll be the happy one

    With this Knife she ends his life,
    Finally ending the constant strife

    As She Drinks her last bit of tea
    For the first time, She feels Free


    -Samm Murray [ME]
  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:19 PM
    J_9
    Well, it is good but I think it is actually quite morbid.
  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:21 PM
    Sodium
    Morbid?

    Heyy I'm only 14 lmao
  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:23 PM
    haleyjames
    I think it cool but it sounds frighting.
  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:25 PM
    Sodium
    It IS frightening
  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:36 PM
    Sodium
    Well I guess yeah its morbid... but I love it... =]
  • Apr 13, 2007, 05:37 PM
    Sodium
    I love how it is, Its not about me its not about anyone I know
    Its about one girl getting abused all her life and hiding it, and one day, she defeats her attacker
    She's free She's her Own Girl Now, Im sry if you don't understand it like I do or feel the same way, but I love it :P
  • Mar 30, 2009, 07:12 PM
    bellanotre

    I like it!
  • May 15, 2009, 08:23 AM
    oscarlicous

    I think that its really good! I like it

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