Im in grade 10 and I had to write a poem about someone I cared about. So I'm writing about this girl I love. Is this any good? And if you are a girl in high school could you say that in your answer. Thanks a lot!


My love is golden like a glistening angel in the sky.
Golden like a splendid sunset in the summer.
Her voice is like a soothing melody that warms my heart.
Her beautiful brown eyes are like sweet chocolates that
brighten my day.
Her dark hair shines like those of a beloved princess.
She has the silliest yet most charming smile this world has
ever seen.
I love everything about her, nothing I hate.
I can only hope she believes me when I express my
love.
But one thing she knows is that we’re better together.


I will shower her with my unmatched love.
I will never leave her or grieve her and I will always
believe her.
I will always care for her when she’s down, and celebrate
with her when she’s up.
I will protect her with all my might, never will I let her feel
scared.
My fists will punish any soul who dares to harm my
precious angel.

Very nice poem! How about "My love is golden like the halo of a glistening angel in the sky." Angels wear white, but their halos are made of gold.

Also, "Her dark hair shines like that of a beloved princess" and "But one thing she knows is that we're better together than apart."

I went to high school when there were dinosaurs roaming the earth.

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

Very nice poem! How about "My love is golden like the halo of a glistening angel in the sky." Angels wear white, but their halos are made of gold.

Also, "Her dark hair shines like that of a beloved princess" and "But one thing she knows is that we’re better together than apart."

I went to high school when there were dinosaurs roaming the earth.

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Thanks a lot!!

Do you think that it sounds weird if I write something like "my heart skips a beat when I see her"? Like after the line "I love everything about her, nothing I hate". If it's a good idea, can anybody help me make that a good line?

Every time I catch sight of her or even just hear her name, my heart skips a beat.

(You're so much better at this!)

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

Every time I catch sight of her or even just hear her name, my heart skips a beat.

(You're so much better at this!)

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What do you mean I'm better than this?

Ohh oops. Better at this**
Haha I'm actually not

You did a great job writing the poem, so I trust you can whip up one more line. :D

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

You did a great job writing the poem, so I trust you can whip up one more line. :D

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Haha thanks. I made a couple more. I have to read this in front of my class tomorrow. A class full of girls. I'm the only guy. I hope they don't think it's horrible

Lol I'm sure u would do great!
And yes I'm a girl in high school it sounds very nice!
Good luck!