This isn't perfect but I recently had a lot of spare time on my hands for reasons I'm not going to talk about and I got bored and started writing. I'm just going to put up some of the lyrics I wrote, it be great if you guys/gals can tell me what you think.

Only 16 years old but my lifes in destress
Its hard to digest with a hole in my chest
Where my heart should be
But in case you didn't see, this is me
I ain't foolin no one accept me
I come from a broken home
The sound of my life downed out by the tone
Of the yelling the screaming, hatred in the air
What a surprise I've gone done shaved off all my hair
And hit the streets...
I've gone done this all by my lonely
Had no help from any my homies
Going to reach the top and say it was all me
So **** you mom and **** you dad
Neither of you fools saw this gift I had
What you ever do for me?
While you was fighting and yellin, I was on the street
Making stack after stacks
Dealing dro to my class
What kind of life is that for a 16year old to have?


If I could get your opinion that be great, thanks.

Wow, really good. I write too, want to hear?

Thanks ,yeah sure I'd like to hear your stuff, you really think that's good?

I think its VERY good. You're very talented. Here's some of mine, not rap, but anyway...

When I'm in your arms
And I close my eyes
I wouldn't care if the whole world
Just passed me by
You will never know
How much you mean to me
But I got the rest of my life just to help you see,
I've only got one life,
I could never have two
But as long as I'm alive,
I want to spend it with you
I'll be right here with you
Even if times get rough
'cause to me always
You're the definition of love,
You hold the key to my heart
Only you can get in,
Looking in your eyes
Is like the shining stars in heaven.
You're my perfect match,
My soulmate, my best friend
You're my infinity
On the scale of one through ten.
I mean every word that I say
Just look in my eyes
The love that we share
Was never made to die,
I just want to make you happy,
Maybe that's my goal
I'll forever love you
With all my heart and soul,
Forever.


This is very old, from 10th grade I believe. Me and my friend wrote it. Good? Or.. no?

Yeah man that's good for a love song

Well, its supposed to be a love song,. sort of I guess? Anyway, got anymore stuff? I'd love to hear it!

Yeah I got lots more, ill put up the rest of the song from that bit I put above, and some more, ill put it up ASAP but I got to run now so soon.

I've got more lyrics that I have written and I WOULD REALLY LIKE TO HEAR WHAT OTHER PEOPLE THINK OF THIS STUFF, I HAVE MORE IF ANYONE WANTS TO HEAR JUST MSG ME!!

Dude, cool lyrics. I'm not really into rap, but this is cool. Could you rate my lyrics? I'm emoxpixxie. Tell me whatcha think please. Cool lyrics once again. X

Yeah sure I'd like to see your lyrics