Here is what I came up with. What do you think?
Each day our children go to school to learn, only to witness some form of school violence. School violence in the form of bullying, trash talking to dangerous weapons bing deplayed.

This is the third thesis you are writing?

I find your punctuation to be "off." It should be "... some form of school violence in the form of bullying ... "

Sounds good, but let's put it into good English:

Each day too many of our children go to school to learn, only to witness some form of school violence -- school violence in the form of bullying, disrespect toward authority figures, trash talking, and the secret carrying and displaying of dangerous weapons, to name a few.

Com/220 class I have to come up with a thesis statement on school violence. Here is what I have so far. Each day our children go to school to learn, only to encounter some form of school violence.

I gave you an answer on another thread.

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com/220 class I have to come up with a thesis statement on school violence. Here is what I have so far. Each day our children go to school to learn, only to encounter some form of school violence.

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My answer is the same as it was on your other thread.

This is only my second, I changed my topic.

Thank you both for your input. I now know I am on the right track.

Now I am struggling with compelling and counter arguments. I want to use statistic to support my facts.

Unfortunately I don't have the time to do this project for you.

Wondergirl, take it away!

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Originally Posted by wasusank

Now I am struggling with compelling and counter arguments. I want to use statistic to support my facts.

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The Internet should be rife with articles on school violence, so I'm not sure why you're having trouble. By "compelling" you mean FOR school violence? Statistics should be easy to find too. What kinds of stats do you want?