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  • May 7, 2010, 09:26 PM
    pilbaraprince
    Are these lyrics any good, behonest, thanks
    And now I bleed this blood again ,
    Pumping this stolen blood through my veins again
    Like the rat at my door, bleeding it ever more
    Blood dripping not who I am
    Blood so red I forget again

    Angel of death angel fire
    Clip my wings or love and desire
    ………….desire

    Running throw the flames is no game
    Is no game I wish to play.
    ………….. desire

    Like a cup with no bottom
    A bottom with no top
    Never will fill
    Or keep what it’s got

    Angel of death angel of fire
    Clip my wings of love a desire
    ………... desire

    Running throw the flames is no game
    Is no game I wish to play.
    ……….. desire

    Love is new love is old
    Love is what makes me cold
    Smoking the new of day
    Then letting it get away
    ……….. Just drift away
    ……….Just bleed away

    Angel of death angel of fire
    Clip my wings of love and desire
    ………so I can’t fly away
    ………but drift away
    ………bleed away……
  • May 7, 2010, 09:40 PM
    Clough
    Hi, pilbaraprince!

    There's some good rhyming going on!

    Do you have a title for it and any idea as to how you would like the rhythm to be as well as the meter?

    Thanks!
  • May 7, 2010, 09:52 PM
    pilbaraprince

    Thanks, nah no name yet and not to shore about the rest ether just words at the moment
  • May 8, 2010, 01:21 AM
    Clough
    Writing anything that has meaning takes time, patience and lots of practice to make it just right!

    If you were to title it, what would you think might be some possible titles, please?

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