Hey guys, for some reason I started to love write.

One of my goals is to get at least one novel published in my life.

Here's a sample of what I wrote:

At your very lowest moment, you are conflicted with a decision. Do you give the person that was once a big part of your life the satisfaction of knowing you miss their presence? Or do you continue keeping it burried deep inside the one thing you gave them.

The heart....

Let me know what you guys think of it? How does it sound?

That's a little short of a sample to judge from! The conflict sounds interesting. I would recommend, though, that if you like to write, you be as careful as possible with your spelling and form, even when chatting and online. Things like that can really affect how seriously an editor will take you.
Don't give up your dream! Work hard, and remember, no pain, no gain.

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Originally Posted by YoungHyperLink

That's a little short of a sample to judge from! The conflict sounds interesting. I would recommend, though, that if you like to write, you be as careful as possible with your spelling and form, even when chatting and online. Things like that can really affect how seriously an editor will take you.
Don't give up your dream! Work hard, and remember, no pain, no gain.

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When I write more ill post it on here. Do you think you can give me feedbacks?

Sure! Not that my opinion means much, but I'd be glad to.

Not to be finnicky, but you can start by capitalising your I's (I, I'll, I've, etc.). Just to instill a good habit. I'll look forward to seeing your work!

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Originally Posted by YoungHyperLink

Not to be finnicky, but you can start by capitalising your I's (I, I'll, I've, etc.). Just to instill a good habit. I'll look forward to seeing your work!

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Okay thanks Young! =P

What Hyperlink said. You need to be careful of your spelling, punctuation and typing. Nobody really minds on a site like this, but getting into bad habits will make it harder to recognise your mistakes in stuff for publication.

Give us a bigger sample. It's almost impossible to judge so small a piece.

Remember, a writer writes. I know a lot of people who can put together beautiful sentences, but never seem to get round to actually finishing anything.