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  • Apr 2, 2009, 10:49 AM
    nathan08
    my lyrics one
    The Blues

    (Chorus)
    It goes phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    Phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    (Verse 1)
    My farther walked out and left me, Left me to take care of my mother
    My mother told me, He looked like a mean danny glover
    My mothers always been their, That's why I love her
    She brought me new jordons and a matching top
    I Always told her id pay her back, When I make it to the top
    As I got older, I got more wiser, Stopped bringing drunk chicks back to the house
    Didn't want to wake my mother, So I stayed quiet as a mouse
    I got even older, And my world started to change
    Got mixed up in the wrong crews. I think I forgot about them donts and dos

    (Chorus)
    It goes phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    Phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    (Verse 2)
    Got hooked up on cocaine. Got drunk on hennessy
    Now my girlfriend. She don't give a about me
    She's off with the next man, Heard my mother got sick, So I droped the coke and ran
    I never wanted this. It was the stress I guess
    Me acting like a big man, In the big wide world
    my mothers six feet under, Now my lifes starting to uncurl
    Went back to my ways, But crime never pays
    I lost the person I love, The person I want to marry
    Theirs a devil in side me. They even nicked named me carrie

    Im sorry!

    (Chorus)
    It goes phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    Phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    (Verse 3)
    As the years pass on, I look back on the things that were rights and wrongs
    I put down the drugs, And desided to write songs
    As I told my mum I would
    And I found the love of a good girl, And I got a baby on the way
    But without my mother, The skys are still gray
    I always visit your grave. But so meny tears surprised I don't drift away
    And il never leave my kid, As my farther once did
    So I shut out the bad memorys, I closed the lid
    I love you mum. Wish I never done half the things I did


    (Chorus)
    It goes phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two

    ... Repeat x2
    Phoenix to memphis, Home of the blues!
    Brockley to compton, Home of the crews!
    Raised by my mother, With them donts and dos
    Poppa walked out, When I was two
  • Apr 4, 2009, 06:18 PM
    Clough

    Hi, nathan08!

    I like the chorus! My suggestion with the verses would be to re-word them so that they are a bit shorter and the lines more equal in length so that they will fit better with a meter and a rhythm.

    Do you have an idea for a possible melody for this?

    Thanks!
  • May 26, 2009, 06:47 AM
    nathan08
    Thanks :)
    Il keep that in mind

    I don't have a melody Yet :)
  • May 27, 2009, 06:46 PM
    Clough

    Hi again, nathan08!

    If you shorten the lines up so that they're more rhythmic, I can show you how you might be able to add a melody to them.

    If you have trouble shortening them up and making them more rhythmic, please let me know on this thread.

    Thanks!

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