A grieving heart :(


When the heart seems nothing but an empty ocean,
Then the heart is suffering in more ways than one...

When the eyes start getting moist without any reason,
Then the heart is suffering in more ways than one...

When there seems to be misery in every walk of life,
There seem to be no ways to end the pain and strife...

When even loved ones fail to soothen the soul,
To create havoc in thy life,it feels like even destiny is on a roll...

When nothing you do seems to be going right,
Then its time to get away and try to be alone,out of everyone's sight...

A few moments with yourself where there is reasonng and thinking,
May pave out the way for a lovely new happiness and self awakening...

Mny a times a thousand words spoken when deeply hurt,
Fall short of expressing what a grieving heart indeed meant...

-----------------------------------Giridhar

Beautiful! Very heartfelt and touching!
I love the passage that includes self awakening.. excellent!

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Originally Posted by giri_passport

A grieving heart :(

When the heart seems nothing but an empty ocean,
Then the heart is suffering in more ways than one....

When the eyes start getting moist without any reason,
Then the heart is suffering in more ways than one.....

When there seems to be misery in every walk of life,
There seem to be no ways to end the pain and strife....

When even loved ones fail to soothe the soul,
To create havoc in thy life, it feels like even destiny is on a roll....

When nothing you do seems to be going right,
Then its time to get away and try to be alone, out of everyone's sight.....

A few moments with yourself where there is reasoning and thinking,
May pave out the way for a lovely new happiness and self awakening.....

Many times a thousand words spoken when deeply hurting,
Fall short of expressing what a grieving heart indeed is feeling....

-----------------------------------Giridhar

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Hi, giri_passport!

I like it! I've just made a few, minor changes to it that are marked in red.

Did you write this because of the way that you might be feeling, please?

Thanks!

Hi Artlady,

Thanks for your encouraging words... Even the minutest of appreciation for my writings pushes me to do better the next time I decide to write...

Hi Clough,

I have started looking forward to your feedback in every poem that I post here :)... And your suggestions/observations are always worth heeding to... Thanks

Hi again, giri_passport!

I notice now that you've posted a number of times in the Writing forum topic area. I'm sorry that I haven't responded to your threads!

Thanks!

Hi Clough,

It's fine if you do not find time to comment sometimes... I understand that we all have our chores to look into before we look to help others... As for your question, I am not totally depressed and writing this... Yeah but I can sometimes imagine situations on which I want to write

Are you into music at all? What I mean specifically is, do you play a musical instrument or have you ever written the words to a song?

Thanks!

No I haven't written particularly for a song... And unfortunately I do not play any instruments... I really believe that a poem written once is not perfect 99% of the times... It has to go through a conscious refinement of words and phrases,to make it more meaningful... If this refinement helps my poems to fit as songs,I would be really happy but frankly I have not tried it yet

If you might want to try writing the lyrics to songs, I can show you how they might fit to music. I've done that a number of times on this site with people.

Do you know someone who plays the piano or maybe an instrument where a person can play single note melodies like a flute or maybe the guitar?

I know that you have the ability and that you would be good at writing lyrics! It shows in the poetry that you've written!

Thanks!

I do have a room mate who is trying his hands at guitar :) But sir, I really feel all this is very new to me... Till now I have just thought of different situations and things and written my poems... But fitting them to songs might seem something new and interesting too

We can do this, giri_passport! I'll show you how, if you would like to do it.

Do you have pianos or keyboards where you are, please?

Thanks!

I do not have any instruments here sir... Actually I am at my workplace... I am a software engineer :) I manage to post here when the workload is less

You would have an keyboard HERE. I can even show you how to play it!

Yes I do have the virtual keyboard open now... Looks great to try :) You seem to be an expert in such things

Thanks!

Please click on the following link.

YouTube - Edward and Bella - River flows in you (twilight)

I can write and play pieces like that. It's a very pretty piece, and you could have a piece/song that's your very own that's similar!

Thanks!

Its Unfortunate that I am not able to access that link you gave :( These are company policies to block entertainment related links... However I will have a look at it from home and let you know whether I am able to proceed... Thanks a ton Clough

I do understand, and I will look forward to working with you later, if writing a song is something that you would like to do! Right now, it's very early in the morning for me, and I need to get some sleep!

My current time is 4:58 A.M. I'll be back on this site in about twenty or twenty-two hours.

I hope that you might be here also!

Thanks!

Oops... its high time you catch some sleep... Take care... Yeah I will be available at this time also tomorrow

I'm here right now giri_passport, but not for long because it's starting to get very late for me...

If I new more about when you're usually on here, it would help! It also probably would be good to be on at the same time when you're at home and not at your workplace.

Thanks!