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  • Dec 11, 2008, 10:42 AM
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    Here is another poem, but its unfinished. TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK
    The morning sun reminds of your smile
    Dreams of you run wild all the while
    The song of the birds, like your laughter through space
    And the breeze on my cheek, conjure an image of your face
    The rustling of leaves, I hear your voice
    Thoughts of you cancel every other noise
    Will you walk with me, so we can enjoy life?
    Taking away every care
    You've given meaning to my smile
  • Dec 11, 2008, 10:55 AM
    Rohin Arora

    You are going good.its all practical and no air castles or something.keep up your good work.nad you,tell me when it gets completed.
  • Dec 11, 2008, 11:00 AM
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    Thanks Rohin! What do you mean by "no air castles" ? Yeah, if I finish it, I will post it :)
  • Dec 11, 2008, 11:04 AM
    Rohin Arora

    U no building castles in the air(imaginations,which are far from realtiy are generally the part of romantic or love based poems)
    Yours is close to heart in practical.
    All the best.

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