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  • Oct 23, 2008, 01:44 PM
    nathan08
    Song I Wrote
    Hey I Wrote Another Song. Was Wondering If You Could Help Me With This One To, Like To See If Its Any Good Or Not. Thanks!


    ..
    I Wish I Never Met You

    You don't have to be perfect baby, Im just looking for love
    You don't ever have to feel down baby, I've got kiss's and hug's
    You don't have to look no further, Baby I can be the one
    And I can't just let you go, So I want to let you know, This isn't the end of the road
    You know I'm going nowhere, Till death to us part, Baby you know that I care


    (Chorus)
    But why do I love you so much, Why do I earn for your touch
    Why do you keep playing game's, When you know I feel pain
    My friends say I'm crazy, But I'm crazy for you
    So please tell me your love, Your love isit ture
    Sometimes I wish I never met you, No I wish I never met you
    But my love is so ture, Baby my love is so ture


    You don't ever have to work hard baby, I'll do things for you
    You don't ever have to feel frightened baby, I'll be right next to you
    You don't ever have to worry, Baby I'll always stay true
    Forever and ever baby, It's going to be me and you
    And I can't just let you go, So I want to let you know, This isn't the end of the road
    You know I'm going nowhere, Till death to us part, Baby you know that I care


    (Chorus)
    But why do I love you so much, Why do I earn for your touch
    Why do you keep playing game's, When you know I feel pain
    My friends say I'm crazy, But I'm crazy for you
    So please tell me your love, Your love isit ture
    Sometimes I wish I never met you, No I wish I never met you
    But my love is so ture, Baby my love is so ture


    You don't ever have to worry about clothes baby, You know I'll keep you worm
    You don't ever have to worry about food baby, You know I'll cook for you
    You don't ever have to worry, Baby I'll always love you
    And I can't just let you go, So I want to let you know, This isn't the end of the road
    You know I'm going nowhere, Till death to us part, Baby you know that I care


    (Chorus)
    But why do I love you so much, Why do I earn for your touch
    Why do you keep playing game's, When you know I feel pain
    My friends say I'm crazy, But I'm crazy for you
    So please tell me your love, Your love isit ture
    Sometimes I wish I never met you, No I wish I never met you
    But my love is so ture, Baby my love is so ture
  • Oct 23, 2008, 01:51 PM
    ajithkumarh

    Hey looks good.
    Try writing more.
    All the best.
  • Oct 25, 2008, 09:56 AM
    nathan08

    Thank's :)
  • Oct 25, 2008, 10:17 AM
    Wondergirl

    It's excellent! (btw, plural nouns do not get apostrophes -- "kisses," not "kiss's" and "hugs," not "hug's" and "thanks," not "thank's" -- apostrophes are for possessives, belonging to something or someone, like "Nathan's gloves")

    Have you put it to music yet?

    Be careful posting your songs on the Internet. They become fair game for anyone who wants to steal them, add music, and get them recorded. I'd hate for you to be listening to the radio one day and hear your song coming out of it.
  • Oct 25, 2008, 12:12 PM
    nathan08

    Thanks for all the advise I'll keep them in mind,

    And I isn't put them to music yet :)
  • Jun 9, 2011, 01:58 AM
    defox
    I like it a lot can I sing it?
  • Jul 10, 2011, 10:28 PM
    nO_NaME_guY
    Good as bro :]
    You're really really good at writing songs
  • Oct 3, 2011, 09:07 PM
    jaydiepie
    Cool as bro... :) u should sell it to a singer for money... pays really good
  • Dec 23, 2011, 07:20 AM
    Love159
    Dude it good

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