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  • Jul 10, 2008, 02:50 PM
    Sonador101
    Who am I. my poem hope you like it.
    So many things,
    That I want to change.
    Thses things,
    About me,
    About my life,
    I wish could've been different.
    People,
    Places,
    Familiar faces,
    Falling away.

    But ifnone of it happened.
    Who would I be?
    Would I bewho I am?
    Who I write what I have written?
    Would I love, like I love now?
    Would I know how,
    To be strong,
    To get along?
    Would I beweak,
    Unable to speak?
    Would I still,
    Be consumed,
    By unbearable fear?
    Would I enjoy,
    Being loved,
    Since it is so rare?
    Would I even be happy?

    If he never left,
    If our money we still had,
    I'd be ignorant,
    And glad.

    I wouldn't have learned,
    How to find,
    What they didn't want me to find.

    But would I be me?
    Is this who I am,
    Supposed to be?
    Was I meant to suffer,
    So others wouldn't have to?
    Are the poems I write,
    Going to help anyone?
    I want to change,
    But who would I be?
    Would I like her?
    Who would I be?
    Or I am supposed to be,
    This person.
    Forever, more.
  • Jul 10, 2008, 03:09 PM
    N0help4u
    That is really good, Something many people think about a lot
    If I hadn't married him what would I have done instead? If I hadn't run into this person and gotten this job where would I have ended up at? If I hadn't changed my mind and moved back to my home town?
    So many questions. And you have to wonder if they are better left unanswered or not.
  • Jul 11, 2008, 11:13 AM
    Sonador101
    Thanks!
  • Jul 30, 2008, 02:11 AM
    Clough
    This one is good, but could use a little work in order to make it more readable and have a better form to it for the flow. If you don't mind, when I have time, I would like to edit it some for you. I know that it's from your own heart, but I think that I know from where you are coming with your thoughts.

    Please let me know if it's okay for me to do that?

    Please keep writing!!

    Thanks!

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