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  • Oct 25, 2010, 05:53 PM
    jsmnferrer
    Correct my paragraph
    Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers? Benjamin Franklin said; “A penny saved is a penny earned”. This principle applies to the American and foreign online student. Today's students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters and supplies.

    The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states is one reason online courses appeal to Axia college students. They would rather cushion there financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires or risking icy road conditions.

    Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books however, online courses provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.

    Additionally, online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents, must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones.

    Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks, staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree; a home computer. A computer is an online students conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.

    Franklin D. Roosevelt exclaimed that, “Happiness is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet, even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.



  • Oct 26, 2010, 01:21 AM
    Clough
    Hi, jsmnferrer!

    Is that something that you wrote or something that someone else wrote that you're wanting advice on how it could be worded and formatted better so that it can be "corrected"? Also, it would help to know as to why it was written in order to help you the best.

    Knowing the purpose for writing it is very important for anyone to be able to advise you the best.

    Thanks!
  • Nov 20, 2011, 11:56 AM
    abeer20011
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