Okay, here are the lyrics. Deep breaths.

You misunderstand
This isn't some insane phase
Where I threaten and pretend
Like some lost small child's
Cry out for attention
I'm full of good intention

You misunderstand
You misunderstand

And we'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
And we'll save the day
But with our feeling burieds undernesth the dirt

I don't really care
Just as long as your there
Some addiction meant to scare
The younger generation
With faery tales and dreams of
Polite consideration

You misunderstand
You misunderstand

And we'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
And we'll save the day
But with our feelings buried underneath the dirt

Well, there they are. In all theie glory. Well, I hope so anyway. Please tell me what you think.

I listen to music all the time and they sound fine to me.

Hi Emo,
They appear pretty good to me. Can't wait to hear the soundtrack! You should get them written up.

Well I listen to many songs and those lyrics sound good !

Thanks you guys, it means a lot!

They look OK to me I would love to here the tune as I am a musicion Myself and bet it would be better with the music

There good

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Originally Posted by emoXpixxie

Okay, here are the lyrics. Deep breaths.

You misunderstand
This isn't some insane phase
Where I threaten and pretend
Like some lost small child's
Cry out for attention
I'm full of good intention

You misunderstand
You misunderstand

And we'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
And we'll save the day
But with our feeling burieds undernesth the dirt

I don't really care
Just as long as your there
Some addiction meant to scare
The younger generation
With faery tales and dreams of
Polite consideration

You misunderstand
You misunderstand

And we'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
And we'll save the day
But with our feelings buried underneath the dirt

Well, there they are. In all theie glory. Well, I hope so anyway. Please tell me what you think.

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They are actually quite brilliant.I listen to songs with lyrics like this all the time.

They rhyme and have a rhythm to them. They would work with music.

Music Teacher.

Very good. However, I didn't get

"Some addiction meant to scare
The younger generation
With faery tales and dreams of
Polite consideration"

They look pretty good to me, I listen to music all the time and I write poetry and lyrics also, put music to them, then they will really sound great

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Originally Posted by emoXpixxie

Okay, here are the lyrics. Deep breaths.

You misunderstand
This isn't some insane phase
Where I threaten and pretend
Like some lost small child's
Cry out for attention
I'm full of good intention

You misunderstand
You misunderstand

And we'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
And we'll save the day
But with our feeling burieds undernesth the dirt

I don't really care
Just as long as your there
Some addiction meant to scare
The younger generation
With faery tales and dreams of
Polite consideration

You misunderstand
You misunderstand

And we'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
And we'll save the day
But with our feelings buried underneath the dirt

Well, there they are. In all theie glory. Well, I hope so anyway. Please tell me what you think.

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Well man, I also compose rap songs and you have to make your song longer

The song length is just fine.. this isn't rap by a long shot! You've done a good job here, keep working on your lyrics.
Just a suggestion, look at your chorus - leave out the 'And' on both lines as well as the 'But' and you've made a powerful statement that feels like the kind of 'hook' that publishers are looking for. Trust me, I know these things. LOL

We'll fade away
A footnote in the lives of those we hurt
We'll save the day
With our feelings buried undernesth (sp?) the dirt

Love them... would this be like an alternative or rock song?

I like them and I would like to hear the music that goes with it

Amazing song lyrics! I wish I could write good lyrics, and sing lolz

The lyrics look good to me. Hope you have plans with them.

Thanks you guys for all your comments, glad you like them!

Thank you everyone for your kind words and helpful comments. I appreciate a lot! Thank you especially to NorCal, I have done what you suggested and it is a lot better. And to rankrank55, I would say its an alternative song. Thanks a bunch you guys!
Xxxxxx

Wow. I know you wrote them along time ago, looking at the date this question was posted I mean. But I really like them.
Have you written any other songs more recently? If you have I would love to give them a read too, if that's okay?