I am a new salesman and would like to write letters to potential clients to have them contact me. Short and to the point of what we do is how I want them and I want to catch them in the first or second line so they keep reading any help?
Here is what I have but maybe someone can help me with something better or make some improvements on this.

Good Morning Customer,

I just watned to take a second to touch base with you. My name is (My Name) with (Technology Company). I noticed online you have stores that extend all across the United States.
My company(Technology Company) specializes in servicing Phone and Data systems in retail establishments such as yours.

As a one stop service and installation company we specialize in:

-POS/Voice servicing and Break fixes
-New Store installs
-POS Upgrades
-Wireless Access Point Install
-Customer Counting/ Tracking

These are just a few of our main specialties. One thing (Company) offers over our competition is we have an 80% W2 employee workforce so all work is completed to Spencer standards.
(Technology Company) also performs installation services of this nature to some of the biggest retailers in the world (Gap, Limited,
Kroger, McDonalds, Autozone and many, many others).

I would like to take 15 minutes of your time to discuss what your current and future needs consist of.
Please feel free to email me back and I will follow up with a phone call as well.


Thank You For Your Time

My Name
West Coast Sales Manager
(Technology Company)
555-555-5555

Any edits would be greatly appreciated