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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

I dunno i dont think the tense fits i am suppose to explain it like in present tense i also posted a complete out line i just got

How about this --

Now that I am taking courses, I'm excited to be getting great grades. The people in my support system play an important part in my getting tasks done on time and in my setting aside time to study. My husband, who is my rock, watches Matthew while I attend the live chats and finish up assignments. Robin, Matthew's godmother, takes him now and then for a night, so I have time to myself to unwind. My mom plays with Matthew during the daytime, so I am able to take much-needed naps. My family and friends support me by watching my son while I study or when I have to finish an important assignment. Some of them worry that I will get stressed out or that I won't have enough time for my family. I know I am okay and, with their love and support, can handle all my responsibilities with no problem. If I did not have family and friends to help, I know I could not achieve my goals.

That works a lot better thank you

I will be back on later I have to fix dinner

Hi dinner is over children are in beds yay

I'm here. What's next?

Lets see we have steps one through five covered

Now I have to do rewards system and conclusion with an explanation of when I will return to view my plan

What about this paragraph? Where does it fit?

It is necessary to plan ahead for any technical issue that may come up while pursuing my degree online. The problems that I foresee are; my son getting a hold of my computer, my computer will crash from contracting a virus, or I could lose an important document.

Reward section --

My reward system is something I have had to put a lot of thought into. For instance, I will reward myself with sushi if I pass such-and-such class. Upon completing my next semester of classes, I will reward myself with a spa day. To jump ahead some, when I graduate from college, I will reward myself by going to the beach for the weekend. When I get a job, I will reward myself with a car. To reward us for getting our new home, I will buy a pool.

Crap I forgot about forseeing techinical issues that is where it comes in I am sorry I am so scatter-brained

Ever since my stroke I haven't had a great memory I have to be constantly reminded of things it is rather embarrassing

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

Ever since my stroke I havent had a great memory I have to be constantly reminded of things it is rather embarrassing

Is the technology section long enough?

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

What about this paragraph? Where does it fit?

It is necessary to plan ahead for any technical issue that may come up while pursuing my degree online. The problems that I foresee are; my son getting a hold of my computer, my computer will crash from contracting a virus, or I could lose an important document.

Reward section --

My reward system is something I have had to put a lot of thought into. For instance, I will reward myself with sushi if I pass such-and-such class. Upon completing my next semester of classes, I will reward myself with a spa day. To jump ahead some, when I graduate from college, I will reward myself by going to the beach for the weekend. When I get a job, I will reward myself with a car. To reward us for getting our new home, I will buy a pool.

the reward section works well

It is necessary to plan ahead for any technical issue that may come up while pursuing my degree online. The problems that I foresee are; my son getting a hold of my computer, my computer will crash from contracting a virus, or I could lose an important document.
This is what I plan on doing to combat these issues, I will always put my computer out of my son's reach, I will make sure my computer is equipped with the latest virus software, and to always back up my assignment on disk or send my documents in an email to myself a paragraph is 3-5 sentences right

I think it is long enough

How about --

It is necessary to plan ahead for any technical issue that may come up while pursuing my degree online. The problems that I foresee are: my son getting ahold of my computer, my computer crashing from contracting a virus, and losing an important document. In order to combat these issues, I will always put my computer out of my son’s reach, I will make sure my computer is equipped with the latest virus software, and I will always back up my assignments on disk or send documents in an e-mail to myself.

Wow that is great... only if I can home in on my writing abilities like you... I will work on it

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

wow that is great...only if i can hone in on my writing abilities like you...i will work on it

I deleted a few phrases that said nothing, but didn't do much else. Most of it is yours.

I worked with three heartless editors who ripped up my sentences before their companies published my writings. Been there, done that.

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

I deleted a few phrases that said nothing, but didn't do much else. Most of it is yours.

I worked with three heartless editors who ripped up my sentences before their companies published my writings. Been there, done that.

lol OMG I couldn't imagine what kind of books do you write... I knoe I am off subject just curious

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

lol OMG i couldnt imagine what kind of books do you write...i knoe i am off subject just curious

One long article for the Chicago Historical Society about the Auditorium Building, three books on Texas history and one on Illinois history (mostly bought by schools for their state history curricula), and one short story for a autism magazine about an autistic young man. I have on the back burner (still thinking about and writing) a romance for older women and several children's books.

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Originally Posted by Wondergirl

One long article for the Chicago Historical Society about the Auditorium Building, three books on Texas history and one on Illinois history (mostly bought by schools for their state history curricula), and one short story for a autism magazine about an autistic young man. I have on the back burner (still thinking about and writing) a romance for older women and several children's books.

Wow I am interested in the one about the autistic young man my six year old step son is autistic

Let's finish this first, and then I will send you my story.

OK we are almost there

How's this --

The goal that I worry about the most is finishing my Associate's. My family and friends will all pitch in with anything I need, from watching my child to critiquing a paper. I plan to make time for my family and friends by calling them on nights when I cannot get out and making sure I set aside a couple of times a month to go visiting. At home I am always up early, so I can complete all household chores, and save my family from having to do my chores while I attend school. I plan to look at my plan every couple of months to make sure I am following it and staying on track. I don't want to lose sight of all the little, everyday details while tackling the most important tasks in my plan.

If I follow through with my plan, I will have a happy and fulfilling life. My family is all the support I need to achieve my goals; they have always stood by me through thick and thin. I want the satisfaction of finishing school and achieving all my goals. I will not quit. What drives me is my family being proud of me for finishing my degree and making my life more successful by getting a great job, moving out of my parents' house, and having the tuition money to get my Bachelor's degree, which, in turn, will get me an even better job.

That is excellent thank you, you have been such a great help... thank you for giving me your valuable time

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

that is excellent thank you, you have been such a great help...thank you for giving me your valuable time

90%+ of it is yours. Now put it all together.

Great I will

Do you want to see it all together

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

do you want to see it all together

Maybe that's a good idea. I think there would be room here to post it in one hunk.

OK here goes

I want and need to change my life to better me and my family. I am out of work and working to educate myself. In this day and time, both individuals in a relationship must work at paying jobs in order to make ends meet. Right now, we are barely surviving on my husband's pay alone.
I am seeking an online degree from CTU, because I'm so tired of the endless dead-end jobs that lead me nowhere. With this degree, I will be able to get a decent-paying job that will enable me to do my part in support of my family.
I want to be someone who is proud of her job and realizes her own worth as a person. I also want my husband to be proud of me for my attempts at bettering myself and want to take some of the stress off him for being our family anchor during the past two years
Five years ago, I was living with my parents; my husband was the only party bringing in money. I decided that I had to make a change, but I knew I needed to be home with my son also. I enrolled for classes at CTU online. It gave me the opportunity that a traditional college did not. It gave me the opportunity to learn and be there for my family. I was worried at first that I would not get back into the swing of things; other things that worried me were; that I am not smart enough, suffering from another stroke and losing the support from my family. I soon found that I was getting great grades. My family and friends supported me for the most part by watching my son while I studied or when I had to finish an important assignment. Some had worries that I would get stressed out or I would not have enough time for my family. I soon proved them wrong by handling all my responsibilities with no issues. This is my vision for the future: It is five years from now, and first I do a quick review of my journey. The Internet made it possible to learn about colleges without visiting them in person. After reading about CTU, I decided it was the best choice for me. It is highly accredited, and the admissions advisors are very helpful. I could stay home while doing online coursework and look after my small son, meanwhile getting a great education with CTU.
The past five years have been a rollercoaster ride, but I would not change a thing. All my trials and tribulations have brought me to where I am today and the person I have become. I passed all my classes and earned an online degree which first got me an online job. My life is wonderful and extremely fulfilling. I now have a rewarding job at a local doctor's office. I am working toward a Bachelor's in Health Care Management and getting great grades. My husband and I own our own home now and have our privacy back. We are so happy to finally have financial freedom! I am so proud of myself and so are my friends and family. I would not have had it any other way.
Five years ago, my husband, child, and I were living with my parents. Since my husband was the only one in our little family bringing in money, I decided I had to better myself and eventually get a job, but I knew I also needed to be home with our little son. I would enroll for classes at CTU online. It would give me the opportunity that a traditional college did not, to learn and, at the same time, to be at home for my family. I was worried at first that I would not be able to get back into a school mentality. Other things that worried me were that I am not smart enough, that I would suffer from another stroke, and that I might lose the support of my extended family.

I knew, for my vision to become a reality, I needed to first finish my degree, to get a decent-paying job, and to move our little family out of my parents house. To accomplish this, I realized I would have to work diligently. In order not to worry about child care when I got a job, I would somehow work from home until my son went to school full time. My husband's check would pay all the bills, so I would save up my money for a house and to pursue a Bachelor's degree. I would need to make sure only necessary money is spent for our everyday needs and then save the rest.
Now that I am taking courses, I'm excited to be getting great grades. The people in my support system play an important part in my getting tasks done on time and in my setting aside time to study. My husband, who is my rock, watches Matthew while I attend the live chats and finish up assignments. Robin, Matthew's godmother, takes him now and then for a night, so I have time to myself to unwind. My mom plays with Matthew during the daytime, so I am able to take much-needed naps. My family and friends support me by watching my son while I study or when I have to finish an important assignment. Some of them worry that I will get stressed out or that I won't have enough time for my family. I know I am okay and, with their love and support, can handle all my responsibilities with no problem. If I did not have family and friends to help, I know I could not achieve my goals.
It is necessary to plan ahead for any technical issue that may come up while pursuing my degree online. The problems that I foresee are: my son getting hold of my computer, my computer crashing from contracting a virus, and losing an important document. In order to combat these issues, I will always put my computer out of my son's reach, I will make sure my computer is equipped with the latest virus software, and I will always back up my assignments on disk or send documents in an e-mail to myself. The goal that I worry about the most is finishing my Associate's. My family and friends will all pitch in with anything I need, from watching my child to critiquing a paper. I plan to make time for my family and friends by calling them on nights when I cannot get out and making sure I set aside a couple of times a month to go visiting. At home I am always up early, so I can complete all household chores, and save my family from having to do my chores while I attend school. I plan to look at my plan every couple of months to make sure I am following it and staying on track. I don't want to lose sight of all the little, everyday details while tackling the most important tasks in my plan.

If I follow through with my plan, I will have a happy and fulfilling life. My family is all the support I need to achieve my goals; they have always stood by me through thick and thin. I want the satisfaction of finishing school and achieving all my goals. I will not quit. What drives me is my family being proud of me for finishing my degree and making my life more successful by getting a great job, moving out of my parents' house, and having the tuition money to get my Bachelor's degree, which, in turn, will get me an even better job.

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I added a few line spaces for clarity. Check with your instructor about headings? And do you need topic sentences for each new section?

I want and need to change my life to better me and my family. I am out of work and working to educate myself. In this day and time, both individuals in a relationship must work at paying jobs in order to make ends meet. Right now, we are barely surviving on my husband's pay alone. I am seeking an online degree from CTU, because I'm so tired of the endless dead-end jobs that lead me nowhere. With this degree, I will be able to get a decent-paying job that will enable me to do my part in support of my family. I want to be someone who is proud of her job and realizes her own worth as a person. I also want my husband to be proud of me for my attempts at bettering myself and want to take some of the stress off him for being our family anchor during the past two years

Five years ago, I was living with my parents; my husband was the only party bringing in money. I decided that I had to make a change, but I knew I needed to be home with my son also. I enrolled for classes at CTU online. It gave me the opportunity that a traditional college did not. It gave me the opportunity to learn and be there for my family.

I was worried at first that I would not get back into the swing of things; other things that worried me were; that I am not smart enough, suffering from another stroke and losing the support from my family. I soon found that I was getting great grades. My family and friends supported me for the most part by watching my son while I studied or when I had to finish an important assignment. Some had worries that I would get stressed out or I would not have enough time for my family. I soon proved them wrong by handling all my responsibilities with no issues.

This is my vision for the future: It is five years from now, and first I do a quick review of my journey. The Internet made it possible to learn about colleges without visiting them in person. After reading about CTU, I decided it was the best choice for me. It is highly accredited, and the admissions advisors are very helpful. I could stay home while doing online coursework and look after my small son, meanwhile getting a great education with CTU.

The past five years have been a rollercoaster ride, but I would not change a thing. All my trials and tribulations have brought me to where I am today and the person I have become. I passed all my classes and earned an online degree which first got me an online job. My life is wonderful and extremely fulfilling. I now have a rewarding job at a local doctor's office. I am working toward a Bachelor's in Health Care Management and getting great grades. My husband and I own our own home now and have our privacy back. We are so happy to finally have financial freedom! I am so proud of myself and so are my friends and family. I would not have had it any other way.
Five years ago, my husband, child, and I were living with my parents.

Since my husband was the only one in our little family bringing in money, I decided I had to better myself and eventually get a job, but I knew I also needed to be home with our little son. I would enroll for classes at CTU online. It would give me the opportunity that a traditional college did not, to learn and, at the same time, to be at home for my family. I was worried at first that I would not be able to get back into a school mentality. Other things that worried me were that I am not smart enough, that I would suffer from another stroke, and that I might lose the support of my extended family.

I knew, for my vision to become a reality, I needed to first finish my degree, to get a decent-paying job, and to move our little family out of my parents house. To accomplish this, I realized I would have to work diligently. In order not to worry about child care when I got a job, I would somehow work from home until my son went to school full time. My husband's check would pay all the bills, so I would save up my money for a house and to pursue a Bachelor's degree. I would need to make sure only necessary money is spent for our everyday needs and then save the rest.

Now that I am taking courses, I'm excited to be getting great grades. The people in my support system play an important part in my getting tasks done on time and in my setting aside time to study. My husband, who is my rock, watches Matthew while I attend the live chats and finish up assignments. Robin, Matthew's godmother, takes him now and then for a night, so I have time to myself to unwind. My mom plays with Matthew during the daytime, so I am able to take much-needed naps. My family and friends support me by watching my son while I study or when I have to finish an important assignment. Some of them worry that I will get stressed out or that I won't have enough time for my family. I know I am okay and, with their love and support, can handle all my responsibilities with no problem. If I did not have family and friends to help, I know I could not achieve my goals.

It is necessary to plan ahead for any technical issue that may come up while pursuing my degree online. The problems that I foresee are: my son getting hold of my computer, my computer crashing from contracting a virus, and losing an important document. In order to combat these issues, I will always put my computer out of my son's reach, I will make sure my computer is equipped with the latest virus software, and I will always back up my assignments on disk or send documents in an e-mail to myself.

The goal that I worry about the most is finishing my Associate's. My family and friends will all pitch in with anything I need, from watching my child to critiquing a paper. I plan to make time for my family and friends by calling them on nights when I cannot get out and making sure I set aside a couple of times a month to go visiting. At home I am always up early, so I can complete all household chores, and save my family from having to do my chores while I attend school. I plan to look at my plan every couple of months to make sure I am following it and staying on track. I don't want to lose sight of all the little, everyday details while tackling the most important tasks in my plan.

If I follow through with my plan, I will have a happy and fulfilling life. My family is all the support I need to achieve my goals; they have always stood by me through thick and thin. I want the satisfaction of finishing school and achieving all my goals. I will not quit. What drives me is my family being proud of me for finishing my degree and making my life more successful by getting a great job, moving out of my parents' house, and having the tuition money to get my Bachelor's degree, which, in turn, will get me an even better job.

I think she wants it to be all one paper it is suppose to flow from one paragraph to another... I will see what she says I may need more segway to my next paragraph

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

I think she wants it to be all one paper it is suppose to flow from one paragraph to another...I will see what she says i may need more segway to my next paragraph

A teaching moment -- segway is the two-wheeled thing people can ride on; segue is the word you really want.

Ahh I see lol

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

ahh i see lol

You've worked very hard. Go take a rest now.

You too I am going to go to sleep been up since 5 am goodnight and thank you again

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Originally Posted by nitelight198073

you too i am going to go to sleep been up since 5 am goodnight and thank you again

Sleep well and stay in touch.

Hi, nitelight198073!

I'm sorry that I've not been around as promised. It's been due to some health reasons and the fact that I've been having to live at the homes of various friends because of issues with my home.

I can see that you and Wondergirl have already done some really great work together!

I'll review things and see if there's value in my adding my "two-cents" worth to what has already been accomplished here.

Thanks!

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Hi, nitelight198073!

I'm sorry that I've not been around as promised. It's been due to some health reasons and the fact that I've been having to live at the homes of various friends because of issues with my home.

I can see that you and Wondergirl have already done some really great work together!

I'll review things and see if there's value in my adding my "two-cents" worth to what has already been accomplished here.

Thanks!

I understand you know... take care of you first... and thank you again for your help

Please let us know how this works out for you, nitelight198073! I think that I'm finally getting things to be better for me here. Am getting help from a number of different sources.

Thanks!

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artlady agrees: You the bomb!I love what you do!

Well, bless your heart and thank you, artlady!