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  • Mar 2, 2009, 10:04 PM
    avenger9000

    Hey you there let me know when you are ready to help again
  • Mar 3, 2009, 12:06 AM
    Clough
    Hi, Adam!

    I'm here right now! I am usually on a little earlier than now, but still am almost always on late at night. My daughter had major surgery today, so I spent most of the day at the hospital. I'll take a closer look at your lyrics yet tonight.

    Thanks!
  • Mar 3, 2009, 01:59 AM
    avenger9000
    Ok first of all I hope you don't mind that my song is a worship song (but then you figured that already right) and yeah some words Im not very happy with... so do you think the words are good or maybe I can use some better ones? What was the major surgery your daughter had?
  • Mar 3, 2009, 03:53 AM
    Clough

    My daughter had her gallbladder removed. Thank you for asking.

    I've been involved in leadership roles in church music for over 36 years. Your song is something that is close to my heart because of that.

    I will be making some recommendations to you concerning it and do look forward to working on it with you in the near future.

    Thanks!
  • Mar 3, 2009, 01:12 PM
    avenger9000
    Ok that's fine, thought I would make sure that you don't have problems with the worship song.. some people have problems with that... so that's all right!! And I'm looking forward to your recommendations!!


    Thanks

    (Im currently in the process of working on another song and its going to be a sad song about me breaking up with my last girlfriend so once I get that done I will let you have a look at it)

    Thanks for all your help so far and Im looking forward to working with you more on this song!
  • Mar 3, 2009, 04:51 PM
    Clough

    Right now, it's close to 6:00 P.M. where I'm located. I direct the local male barbershop chorus around where I live. We have rehearsal tonight that goes until 10:00 P.M. I will try to be back on here starting at about 11:30 P.M. on. If you're around then, that would be great!

    Thanks!
  • Jul 14, 2009, 06:18 PM
    avenger9000

    Hey you disappeared haha what happened?
  • Jul 15, 2009, 07:46 PM
    Clough

    Hi, avenger9000!

    I was waiting for you to return! I haven't been on all that much lately though, due to some health issues that I've been having. I'll look forward to working with you sometime in the near future, if you would like!

    Thanks!
  • Jul 16, 2009, 04:58 PM
    avenger9000
    Yep that would be good
  • Jul 17, 2009, 02:22 AM
    Clough
    Perhaps we can get together late at night during some of the days of this coming weekend? I don't really have anything going on tomorrow night or Sunday night. I do need to get to bed early on Saturday night because I need to play for church in the morning. Also, on Friday night, I can be on late, but not really late, because I need to get up to direct my barbershop chorus that's singing at a local restaurant during the breakfast hours.

    Thanks!
  • Jul 21, 2009, 04:16 AM
    jake666

    Make it satanic, Death metal like Deicide and Morbid angel, Don't get me wrong I'm not taking the piss, People get bored, yes? They get bored because every new age song is about girls in clubs and jesus oooohhh oh lordy . Just spice it up a little add some violence, death, pure hatred!!

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