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I had forgotten - you need to put a date underneath your header and also have it centered. May 10, 2010 or, you could also use May 9, 2010

The bullets are good with what you're going to offer them.

• Lowest Price Guaranteed! Proof of price from previous vendors will be needed.
• 10% of any order will be donated back to the BOYS & GIRLS CLUBS (Make sure of the name of them.)
• If you do any fundraising, we will donate T-Shirts for the volunteers - up to a maximum of 20 T-Shirts.

Please let us know if you have any questions. We look forward to an opportunity to further discussion with you as to how we might best serve the needs of BOYS & GIRLS CLUBS.

Thank you.

Very Truly Yours,


[Your Name.]

How far away from Napa Valley are you, please?

Thank you very much clough, you have been a huge help on our company. Were not that far away from napa only 2 hours drive not bad a drive, why?

My daughter lives there and runs her own business.

More about that, later...

It's getting very late for me again and I need to get to bed.

I would like to see the final draft of what you're going to send out before you deliver it, please?

Thank you again clough and I will send you the final draft. That's really nice that your daughter lives there, I heard its beautiful up there, If your daughter needs any t shirts let me know and I will help you guys out, that's the only thing I can do for all your help!

I change the header already thank you so much! Your such a huge help, God bless you and your whole family

Here is what I have from you with identifying information removed.

Suggestions are included. Please note the centering and where I've omitted or added things in the body of the letter.

Your Header.

Space four lines down.

May 10, 2010

Address and Contact information of the club.


Dear [Mr. Name,) Please note comma.
Double space.
Please accept this correspondence as being a proposal to provide your company the (BOYS AND GIRLS CLUB) No parentheses needed. one of the most affordable prices available anywhere for your T-Shirts.
Double space.
We really enjoyed visiting you and your facility on April 21st. What we are proposing is the following concerning meeting the needs of your club.
Double space.
• Lowest Price Guaranteed! Proof of price from previous vendors will be needed.
• 10% of any order will be donated back to the BOYS & GIRLS CLUBS. Period.
• If you do any fundraising, No "s". we will donate T-Shirts for the Volunteers - up to a maximum of 20 T- Shirts. Period.
Double space.
Please let us know if you have any questions. We look forward to an opportunity to further discussion with you as to how we might best serve the needs of BOYS & GIRLS CLUBS. Period.
Double space.
Thank you.

Space four lines down.
Everything below should be centered.
Very Truly Yours,

Space four lines down. [Your Signature Here.]

[Your Name.]

I hope that makes sense to you.

Does it?

Do you have any questions, please?

Yes it does, thank you very much clough. Thank you for being so patient and understanding, english is not my first language, and not my best subject. Thank you so much for the help, and if there is something I can do for you please don't hesitate to ask.

It got a little confusing to me with the last edit that I did.

Adding colors and centering makes a post to be filled with a lot of extra stuff for a person to work around.

Basically, you center everything at the top and the bottom of the letter, header, date, the closing [Very Truly Yours] and your name at the bottom. Name and address of the person to whom it's being sent as well as the body of the letter is left-justified.

Everything also needs to look square on the page. Not too much on the bottom and not too much on the top.

I have other ideas for your advertising. But, that is for a later time...

It would be really cool, if you could post some images here sometime of what you've done!

I can hardly think or type right now...

Need to get to bed!

I hope that you have a restful sleep!

God's Love and Peace to You! :)

I forgot one last thing...

You'll want to use either Times New Roman or Ariel for the font. Size 12 is okay. If you try a size 14, that's even easier for people to read, if you can fit everything on one page using size 14. Also, you'll want one inch margins on the sides and no less than 1/2 inch at the bottom and the top, preferably one inch at the bottom and top, but in order to get everything on one page, you may need to use 1/2 inch.

Later...

I would like to say, thank you so much clough for all your help! Even though you don't know me, your welling to stay up and help a stranger get things going. You have a kind heart, God bless you and your family!
I thank you once again!

You're welcome! :)

How did it go today?

It went good, he was happy to see us, hope that was a good sign, and he was happy that we brought the proposal, the way it sounded seems like he was waiting for the proposal, I just hope we get that account so we can get busy this summer!

I'm glad that things went well for you! :)

Do you have any images in your computer of things that you've done concerning screen printing?

Yes I do clough would you want me to send it to you? I don't have much images yet, but ill send as much as I can.

I would really like for you to post them on this thread.

If you have any trouble doing that, please let me know on this thread.

Thanks!

Hey clough! How you doing?
I am going through my album on the camera to see which picture to put in.I would do my best to post it by tomorrow.
I will diffidently let you know if I am having trouble posting it.
Thank you very much for all your help.
If you need any shirts done for your business or just for yourself let me know ill do it for you, that's the only thing I can give back for all the help you have done.