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  • Apr 4, 2009, 12:57 AM
    wolfgangqpublic
    Wrote a Story. But WHAT should I call it?
    Hello -

    I wrote a story for a school contest. It's about a boy that undergoes total change of characters when his father, a Stock Blocker loses all the families wealth.

    Here is a summary:

    Eugene finds himself frustrated over what he sees as life's
    Drastic loss. He wants to clear his mind and make his plan. Wandering
    Aimlessly through the city park to determine the way he would be able to
    Steal from others to benefit himself, he sees young children of the elite
    Mostly accompanied by their nannies. Feeling hateful toward his loss he
    Sees what he thinks his opportunity to make his move. Obviously from great
    Wealth a woman is distracted from her belongings as she takes off after her
    Toddler. He casually walks past her things and bends over and, without a
    Flinch, takes her bag. Thinking how easy it was, he glanced over his
    Shoulder only to find a police officer coming his way. Eugene thought
    Quickly and made his way to the young woman chasing her toddler and handed
    Her the bag. His explanation was he saw she was distracted and was
    Concerned about someone else taking it. The policeman joined the
    Conversation and with a little bit of convincing Eugene managed to walk away
    A hero--but still without money. It was a close call and yet something
    Still stirred in him. It was a feeling unlike any he'd ever had before.
    What was it? He knew what he had attempted was wrong and coming away as a
    Hero did not seem right. He went back to the woman, explained the truth
    About having lost everything he thought was valuable, and that he had
    Planned to take off with her bag.

    Please tell me if you like it and how to call the story. THANKS!

    Sarah.
  • Apr 4, 2009, 01:08 AM
    artlady

    Hello Sarah,

    I like *Wrote a story what should I call it*.

    It's a good gimmick as well for class and have everyone come up with a title.

    I like a story with a moral.I like this one because it is subtle.This person felt shame and remorse.

    The dialogue is very snappy and right to the point and concise.You say a lot in a very short span.

    Great job!
  • Apr 4, 2009, 01:39 AM
    wolfgangqpublic

    Okay, thanks for your support, but I need a really smart, interesting and sophisticated title for my story.

    Please help me... anyone!

    Thanks.

    Sarah.
  • Apr 5, 2009, 07:17 PM
    Couchcarrot
    How about some like:

    A Wealthy Spirit

    The Upside of the Downside

    Keeping the Devil at Bay

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