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Chey5782
Jul 28, 2009, 11:59 AM
Here jenni, you posted some so I thought I would return the favor. Tear it up, I don't really care about criticism, I know it's good enough for me :rolleyes:


Dancing


Your fingertips

Your tongue

Razors edge.

Cut me.

Flesh, spirit, and soul.

Unceremoniously,

We dance in the light.

I, wishing to be a Bodhisattva.

You, a hero.

Whispering words that fall,

Like cobwebs and blood drops.

We paint, the world around us,

With the footsteps left behind.

roxypox
Aug 1, 2009, 03:31 AM
I know you don't care about critism, but I'd love to say I Like it though ;)

artlady
Aug 1, 2009, 03:43 AM
You had me at we paint! Actually you had me before that. You had me at fingertips. Cool
Maybe I will put one of mine up for shi$s and giggles :)
I like it,painful ,intense and strong!