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universe
May 23, 2008, 07:06 AM
D-Day


Twelve miles they crossed on the ocean that day
Ill unto death with the boat's sickly sway.
All this they forgot when they opened the door
And jumped from the boat toward the menacing shore.

Dragged down by their gear some drowned then and there.
They gasped their last breath and uttered a prayer.
Some made it to land where chaos did reign
And each wounded soldier then echoed their pain.

"Mama" one cried as he breathed his last
His voice drowned out by the gun's ugly blast.
A captain sat frozen from shell shock they say
He rose up at last and staggered away.

The fighting continued as many men died.
They fell to the sand, their guns by their side.
Some then scaled the cliffs and onto the land
Engaging in combat, fierce was their stand.

When it was done and the enemy dead
A soldier said "Look" with a nod of his head.
The shore had turned red oh dear God what a sight
Bodies lay floating they had lost the fight.

They raged at the carnage the battle had brought
Lamenting the madness that evil had wrought.
Many years passed and they sat looking back
Their thoughts on the boys lost in the attack.

They were so young on that day when they fell
But they had a job and they did it so well.
We'll never forget all those lives that were lost
Their youth interrupted, the terrible cost.

We don't know much at home about that terrible day
Only those that survived have this to say
"Here's to you guys and we say this with love"
And the heroes smiled back looking down from above.

bushg
May 23, 2008, 08:07 AM
Your poem is beautifully written, I would say if you are not a writer you are well on your way.
Your ryhming is well done and sensible.
You make the reader aware of the intense feelings these soldiers are having as well as their faith, patriotism, love for their family, fellow soldiers and country.
In fact you give the reader a up close and personal look at how it must have been, something that I have never stopped and closely visualized.

Clough
May 24, 2008, 02:40 AM
I agree with the above, and would just like to add that it was very powerful and well done! It's evident that you put a lot of thought and effort into it! :)

Is there a particular reason that you wrote it?