[dwhite757]

Why I Fly

I Fly above the questionable deranged minds
I overlook Dangers,troubles, and failures of all kinds
I try, I try and never ever fail
But you probably want to evade the question
Heart Pumping adrenaline, body fueled using might
I fly so high, I'm out of ordinary sight
The best of the best, just so unique
But you can't understand the feeling of which I speak
Not so much cocky, nor so arrogant
Breath releasing but out comes strength I vent
I fly, I fly brain hurricaning , mind just flowing
No one else can receive the fruit I'm sowing
I'm in the stars, astronomical heights
Blank distances, above extraordinary sights
Fly past Saturn, soaring past Venus
Crew following me, the Greek gods can't see us
I fly through my own mindly means
You can't fit in my jeans
Because I am greatness,Blown past ordinary means

[gheenai]

This is ammasing and very Nice thanks

[Bluerose]

Nice. Poetry, a great way to grow personally and spiritually. And very healing. I hope you plan to share some more of your poetry.

[William1472]

A few random skips, but not too bad. It's easy to see your vision in the words you write, the art of a true poet! Work on the flow of the words, as if speaking them. The reader needs to know pause and emphasis. Try using simple punctuation or simply sentence breaks. Rhyming consistently is only one manner of poem formation and presentation, and for some it is the easiest. A good poem moves the reader, the words carry with them the FEELINGs the author wishes to convey. That should always be your goal, even if you simply write with no goal in mind. Keep it up!