I'm here learning out my ged book... and I'm learning sentence structure, but I can't seem to get this one question right... the most effective revision of a sentence would include which group of words?and also, the most effective combination of sentences would include which group of words?I just...

My test is about sentence structure and I don't know how to use revision in a sentence.

Revise this sentence. When reviewing resumes', applicants with great references and great sales experience are always given great preference by our HR director.

How would I revise this sentence It was a blistering June day; the heat could be seen radiating from the pavement.