 |
|
| Browse | Ask | Answer | Search | Join/Login |
|
|
||||
|
Sun setting behinde me All fallen have rose Whispering that I need to try I stand in the middle Hearing each word Screaming to decode Your heart breaking thoughts Somehow I know That this was never to become I'm better off alone Watching me Your never without me I'm not taking in the lie No, I don't want to sit on your petistal I'm not your prize I can feel your breath Burning me to ashes I guess this is me I know that she is gone I see a closed door So high up I wonder How it doesn't fall It's all true; this is my time I need To embrace the heavan light God help me I fear; Erace my mind Take away all that I know God save her She"s fading Take your hand Ease the pain Make the rain wash it away I see the closed door I wonder how doesn't it fall So much preasure Why don't you break? How can you stand so tall? This was never to become I think I'm better off alone I lay still in the dark No one will find me You speak of my name How can you see? I know that your missing But, that girl isn't me |
||||
|
||||
|
Ok, so I know this isn't helping at all. BUT OMG! The songs I have just read from you then are all like... WOW! I absolutely LOVE them! GOOD LUCK! BTW: I'm 12 too, and I sing, I also need help writing a song too because unlike you I write absolute crap songs! Lol! You. Are. Amazing! |
||||
|
||||
|
This is more me I think. My teacher said one day that he want's us to be perfect and I thought that he was foolish for saying that becaues we will never be perfect; you can lie and hide your flaws but there always there. I am also a deep beleaver in god and at the end I'm saying that we will never be perfect until we go to heavan (See past the light) I open my eyes Seeing evreything For the first time Breaking out Of the land of dreaming Released from my land of stories So many lies in this world we live in Makes me want to dream again All I see has it's place here Without me your still breathing As I fade to light Am I so out of reach? If I fall Will you be calling my name She's slowley drifting All that's left of me Hiding from what I've become So many lies in this world we live in Makes me want to dream again All I see has it's place here Without me your still breathing As I fade to nothing... Close your eyes Turn off the lights I'm never turning back I lay here safe inside of me But, still can't find myself In your lie So many Lies in this world we live in Makes me want to dream again How can you say I need to be perfect If I can't even See past heavan's light K, this song is really speacle to me. So please tell me what to fix and what to keep. :) sorry for miss spellings |
||||
|
||||
|
Save her... Save her... So many qiuqtions whiper Screaming at me that I'm lost A locked door Of fogton memorys Long ago this was my refuge Now I see all my wrongs Have taken you Silence burns into earth One last breath Then down on your knees Pleading For one last try I just want to say I'm not crashing down I'll keep crawling on my knees Seeping out under Coming in closer I can't find myself In this light |
||||
Originally Posted by AmyLeefreak
|
||||
|
Wow! This site has helped me so much! Thanks for your help; Evreybody.
Something's changed In the earth All I know now Seems not to matter Each second counts for something I know this Becaues without it I would would be lost Here behinde the door I hide away Praying to God That you'll forgive me For my mistake Undersatnd I just felt alone I've found myself in a dream Your cold dead eyes Seeing right through me If only looks could kill I would have been gone Long ago... Here behinde the door I hide away Praying to God That you'll forgive me For my mistake Understand I just felt alone... Two nights after I left I came back to Try for one more chance Not surprised to see That were better off without me Where is my home? Two more years Pass by and Now I lay below Shaking the earth Beingth your feet Pleading for fogiveness Please, I feel so cold... |
||||
|
||||
|
Ok, I'm not trying to copy any songs here but, please check out Field of innocence by Evanecence. I think that the music sounds awsome and something like that would sound great here; thanks.
He had me going for the trap He even held me right Just before my heart burned black I don't know how But, there's something wrong He told I was his Even when I didn't belong Can't you see me? I'm not your paper doll So crumbeld up inside And yet you say That I'm the prize Darling that's not me She's still here Buried deep; Hideing in the ashes With each step we take We leave a trail An essence of lies and Our senselessness... Somehow in the darkness You found me Somewhere in the darkness There must be a light I'll find my way out Can't you see me? I'm not your paper doll So crumbled up inside And yet you say I'm the prize Darling; That's not me She's still here Buried deep; Hideing in the ashes Can't I be forgotten Left here in the cold Where I'll grow numb Where I can't be harmed Becaues I can't hold on To this lie... anymore So when I'm gone Remember who I really was Not what you've seen I lie deep |
||||
|
||||
|
Just saying; now that I've been wrighting a lot on here I've learned that a song doesn't need to be verse, choris, verse, choris, end. I mean do any bands not do that? I don't like it. And I'm getting very nice things said to me; thanks. But, I also would like to know were I'm going wrong. Each time I read these I say "That could have been so much better" What am I doing wrong? |
||||
|
||||
|
Hi, AmyLeefreak!
A song can be written any number of different ways. You don't really have to tailor what you write after what you hear others have done. Although, there are certain ways of writing songs that help a song to have form and balance, so that the people listening to it will enjoy it the best because of being able to expect something because it will have form and balance. Do you know what I mean here, please? Thanks! |
||||
|
||||
|
I don't know why I wrote this:p
Where has my love gone? I'm so lost in myself Trapped alone with my own thoughts The screams of my Lonlyyness Remains unheard Before all is lost will You remember me Or am I just so alone My body cries for more pain My heart cries for dovotion I will aways carry Their words of resent The words that bring me back to this state Never meant to be so cold I just gave into the thought Of you'll forgive me It was never to become But, it all seemed true Was it so wrong to say you love me? Before all is lost Will you remember me Or am I just so alone? Grey clouds filled with cries Come to place our loved ones Their last words spoken Pour down in silence I'm to remember this day As the day we lost (Screams) (I'm not talking to her Stop looking at me I'm so sick of it I'm not going Leave me alone Can't you hear me I sware today I'm going to die) |
||||
Not your question?
Ask your question
View similar questions
| Question Tools | Search this Question |
Add your answer here.
Check out some similar questions!
Song writing
[ 4 Answers ]
Were can I find someone to write a song for me
Song writing
[ 2 Answers ]
Ok well this is another song... Its not finished so if you want to you can help me finish it but yeah tell me what you think about it Her life is fading and were just waiting Cause there's nothing we can do.. Her dreams are so clear she learned the hard way Maybe someday she'll change her...
Writing a song
[ 3 Answers ]
Hey! I made this post to hopefully start writing a song. Let's see how it works out.:)
Trouble with essay writing.
[ 7 Answers ]
My literature tests are coming soon... and I´m supposed to write an essay. Well, that would be easy, of course, but I have a difficult topic and that is Why is democracy good. Well, that wouldn´t be that hard of course, but I am allowed to write only the positives, not the negatives... Im not...
View more questions Search
|
