[bladerecon]

I am looking to finish this. I need one more line for the second stanza and a third stanza. I am looking for the second stanza to start with "We" and the third stanza to start with "You" but I will take any suggestions. Pleae help.


When I think of you, I wonder how you’re doing
When I hear you, I become speechless
When I see you, my heart starts beating
When I touch you, I can’t stop
When I kiss you, I want more

We argue like were married
We spend time together like we’ve known each other forever
We make up like nothing ever happened
We hold each other like that’s all we have

[Clough]

Hi, bladerecon!

Thank you for posting in the Writing forum topic area! You'll most likely get the most responses from those you are interested in writing here. Plus, things will be much more workable and I'll be able to fix anything in this area that might go wrong because it's one of the areas that I moderate.

Below, is my response from your other thread. What do you think of it, please?

Thanks!

Hi, bladerecon!

Just some raw suggestions for you below for further ideas. I think that your ideas are great!

But, I also think that things need to be re-worked some so that there's more balance to what you've written.

Quote:
When I think of you, I wonder how you're doing
When I hear you, I become speechless
When I see you, my heart starts beating
When I touch you, I can't stop
When I kiss you, I want more

We argue like were married
We spend time together like we've known each other forever
We make up like nothing ever happened
We hold each other like that's all we have
To have and to hold you is what I want to do forever.

I love you like no one I've known before
I want you to be my one, true love forever.
I need you as the flower needs the rain
I hold on to my dream that we can be together
Forever in the bonds of love.
My additional ideas aren't perfect, but are just meant as suggestions to give you more ideas.

I'm wondering why you didn't put something like this in the Writing forum topic area, please?

Thanks!

[bladerecon]

This is great! Thank you again so much, I think I got what I am looking for.

[Clough]

Well, did you want to work on it some to improve on it to see if it might fit well with music added to it? That's why you sent me a private message, wasn't it?

Thanks!

[bladerecon]

You seem to be the only person that responds to some of my stuff, do you think you could give me your opinion on this please?
https://www.askmehelpdesk.com/writin...er-352714.html

[Clough]

I'm sorry, bladerecon!

I got disconnected from the Internet and was then off for awhile because of that. I do promise that I will respond to you!

Thanks!