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    giri_passport Posts: 34, Reputation: 5
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    Mar 23, 2009, 04:51 AM
    A new poem about the first monsoon rain.Share your thoughts
    The first rain

    I saw the first drops of water kissing mother Earth,
    I saw her open up her arms and embrace every drop with care and warmth...

    Droplets turned into drizzle and soon the brown carpet turned red,
    As the ground soaked itself more and more with every minute that sizzled...

    The trees shed away their weariness and cleansed themselves,
    In the purest form of water pouring right from the skies...

    The birds woke up from their slumber and peeked out of their nests,
    Happy to see the rain which would in turn drive out many pests...

    The animals jumped across to wet themselves,
    To clean their bodies in the only natural shower that transpires...

    It was indeed a lovely sight, indeed a lovely watch,
    The glory of the first rain, nothing else can dare to match...

    ... Giridhar
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    Mar 24, 2009, 10:49 AM

    Very beautiful and profound.
    The imagery is lovely and you use a lot of vivid detail to make the first rain truly come alive for the reader.
    Excellent prose.. you should be very pleased!
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    Mar 25, 2009, 03:14 AM

    Yes, your writing is improving a lot, giri_passport!
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    Mar 25, 2009, 06:18 AM
    Quote Originally Posted by artlady View Post
    Very beautiful and profound.
    The imagery is lovely and you use a lot of vivid detail to make the first rain truly come alive for the reader.
    Excellent prose..you should be very pleased!


    Thanks a lot Artlady... Now my confidence in writing poetry is increasing with every bit of appreciation from you and Clough... Looking forward to your feedback always
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    Mar 25, 2009, 06:20 AM
    Quote Originally Posted by Clough View Post
    Yes, your writing is improving a lot, giri_passport!

    Thanks you sir... I really can't believe getting appreciated from you because you are considered an expert in matters of writing, in this site... I will always seek your opinion in order to improve all the time
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    Jul 3, 2010, 02:29 AM
    Old thread where the original poster hasn't returned in over a year.

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