Is this a good thesis statement? Becoming more aware of native cultures helps us to see the beauty in life

I think that is an amazing thesis statement.

That is an AWFUL thesis statement. There is no support whatsoever...

I would think that as a thesis statement it is a bit too limited for a number of reasons. Needs to be longer.

Importantly,we need to keep in mind that a thesis statement is an introduction to an argument you are going to present. By saying that native culture helps us see the beauty in life is too generalized. In the body of your essay you will need to argue specifics. On this basis you need to mention certain specifics in your statement.

I would have another go at formulating the statement. The best way to do is is to ask yourself this question. " How does native culture help us to see the beauty in life? Your answers to these questions should be the basis for your thesis statement.

On the other hand,if you want to go with your statement then I would add a few things. Perhaps something like this:

Becoming more aware of nature cultures helps us see the beauty of life. Native cultures make us aware of the natural environment. One needs to be aware of the natural environment in order to fully appreciate ourselves and the environment.

I'm not 100 percent happy with my attempt, but it is possible to put together an argument based on what I have said.

P.S. Please don't start a sentence with,'because'.

This thread is from 08; OP probably hasn't been back in a looooong time

Thanks Tic I didn't notice that.


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