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shortandsmall · Feb 10, 2009, 08:44 PM

I just asked a question about thesis staments but I think I have a better one tell me what you think:
Since the age of six I have always been compassionate with an inviting sense of humor, which was when I knew that I was to be a pediatrician, and although other occupations spark my interest I have never backed down.

( my paper is a reacher paper and what we wish to be )

Clough · Feb 11, 2009, 02:08 AM

Originally Posted by shortandsmall

I just asked a question about thesis staments but I think I have a better one tell me what you think:
Since the age of six I have always been compassionate with an inviting sense of humor, which was when I knew that I was to be a pediatrician, and although other occupations spark my interest I have never backed down.

Hi, shortandsmall!

Quoted below, is a possible revision that might explain a little more clearly as to your intended purpose of your thesis, as I think that I understand it to be. It could be used as more of the beginning of the argument to supply reasons to prove your rational as to why you never backed down from your goal in spite of other, compelling and rational reasons to go into a different profession. Please let me know what you think.

So, why have you never backed down from your goal to be a pediatrician when other occupations sparked an interest in you toward them, please?

Thanks!

Since the age of six, I've always been compassionate with an inviting sense of humor. It was at that time that I knew that I wanted to be a pediatrician in order to use those traits that seemed to be a couple of good qualities that a person might need in order to work in that profession. However, although I found there to be compelling and rational reasons to go into other occupations, I've never backed down from my goal to become a pediatrician.