[ironclad04]

Son appeler LE VISAGE

Ceci est le visage qui se decouvre mon nom. La plaine, ordinaire, tout de meme. Paraitre plus dur et vous pourriez voir, ce visage vous ne dit pas la partie de moi. Il ne dit pas comment je me sens a l'interieur. Il ne vous dit pas les choses je cache. Mon visage ne revele pas que je
Pense a la vie, l'amour, ou la politique. Mais vous jugez ce visage et vous me jugez, Par ce que vous regardez, et comment vous voyez. Mais cela n'est pas ou la verite reste. La verite est s'est abritee derrière mes yeux. Ceci est le visage qui se decouvre mon nom. Mais il ne vous dira
Jamais comment je me sens, ou que je suis!

Ecrit par ironclad04, 1998

Relaying my poem "THE FACE" in another language just came to me when I could perfect my talent!

[mudweiser]

Did you just post this through the free translator?

Sarah

[ironclad04]

Did you just post this through the free translator?

Sarah

Nope! Though I would like to sometimes for other languages, but I know french, and latin! Besides its hard because some of the wording requires hifens over the lettering

[mudweiser]

You mean accents.

I'm looking at it and really looks like you went to an online translator. I'm sure other francophones would agree.

Sarah

[Unknown008]

Wow! Nice ironclad! Ok, points I'd like to point out;

La plaine : you sure that exists in your context?

Paraitre plus dur et vous pourriez voir : doesn't quite makes sense to me... :(

Ce visage vous ne dit pas la partie de moi. : modify :'ce visage qui ne vous ne dit pas la partie cachee en moi' That seems moreinteresting like this.

Ou la verite reste : ou est la verite (inversion of subject object place often creates a better way to express deep things.

Ceci est le visage qui se decouvre mon nom. Better : Ceci est le visage qui revele mon nom.

Hope it helped! :)

[Alty]

Wow Unky! You're the bomb! :)

[Unknown008]

Lol... I've already said that NM! Maybe you missed that.

Ok, my first language is creole, then I learned french and english at primary school, which is still the case now that I'm in secondary. I've also learnt some chinese from primary until my third year at secondary school. That's it. Since you've 'taught' me some spanish, and Adam with Atly some German (though there's only a few words) that makes quite a few... :rolleyes:

Thanks for the greenie and Alty. I'm not that 'bomb' :o

[Alty]

The bomb means you're all that, you're great, you're wonderful, we are in awe. Aw. :)

[Unknown008]

Oh, I did not made it sound like what I'd like it to sound... :o I'm not that much "bomb" is better? "La Plaine" for example, that's the first time I hear that... if ironclad meant 'plain', then, that'd be more like... hmm... banal? Or simple?

[ironclad04]

Oh, I did not made it sound like what I'd like it to sound... :o I'm not that much "bomb" is better? "La Plaine" for example, that's the first time I hear that... if ironclad meant 'plain', then, that'd be more like.... hmm...banal? or simple?

My bad! It came out wrong?? I haven't done anything like for the past 3 years, I'm rusty!! Lol it's hard trying to write a language on here you know!:D

[Unknown008]

Yup, I know ironclad. That's why I'm here, to try to make you all 'oily' again, and no more rusty! LOL! :p

[nothing lasts]

Would u teach me french?

[Unknown008]

If you want, nothing lasts. Start another thread if you really want, and PM me the link, k? :)