ChihuahuaMomma
Jul 21, 2008, 02:22 AM
DAY IN THE LIFE OF MY DOG
Sitting on her lap, taking my afternoon nap
When I wake, I’ll stand up and shake
Fur flies ahead, in the winter I tend to shed
I need to be brushed, I can see that she’s rushed
I give a little bark, cause I know we’re going to the park
She slips on her walking shoes, and decides which leash to choose
I slip my paws in the harness, my favorite pink one that says “princess”
We get into the car, but I know the parks’ not very far
She throws my ball, I chase it through the air, giving it my all
In the car home I fall asleep, curled into a heap
What a day at the park, as we arrive I notice its already dark
Time for another nap, as I lay on my mom’s lap
So, I was wondering if I could get some feedback, and perhaps some editing. It's got internal rhyming... so it has to stay that way, but otherwise feel free to edit away!
Sitting on her lap, taking my afternoon nap
When I wake, I’ll stand up and shake
Fur flies ahead, in the winter I tend to shed
I need to be brushed, I can see that she’s rushed
I give a little bark, cause I know we’re going to the park
She slips on her walking shoes, and decides which leash to choose
I slip my paws in the harness, my favorite pink one that says “princess”
We get into the car, but I know the parks’ not very far
She throws my ball, I chase it through the air, giving it my all
In the car home I fall asleep, curled into a heap
What a day at the park, as we arrive I notice its already dark
Time for another nap, as I lay on my mom’s lap
So, I was wondering if I could get some feedback, and perhaps some editing. It's got internal rhyming... so it has to stay that way, but otherwise feel free to edit away!