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bijiou36
Aug 16, 2010, 06:29 PM
My name is Angel,
I am three
My parents despise me
They hate the day I was born
They make me wear clothes all wet and torn

I am six now
They haven't put me in school
They are afraid my bruises and cuts will show
I just wish I'd be dead soon to be out of the world forever
Until my parents have beaten me enough, I know that day is never

I've come to ten
I'm finally in school; I think my teacher is noticing
Just last night my mom kicked me
Then daddy joined in I wish my angel would help me soon
I want to know what I did

I'm fifteen now
I'm still beaten but now my daddy's touching me in bad places
I have a boyfriend; I think he's using me
He beats me every now and then
I feel like my days are finally coming to end

I have no age
My mom, dad, and boyfriend ganged up on me
I think they've been planning

They hit me with bats and hammers
I could feel blood gushing from my head
My eyes became blurred
My head became blank
I remembered to thank my angel
I blacked out, finally

Wondergirl
Aug 16, 2010, 07:10 PM
Ahhhhhh! Another good one, and nicely written with good English and phrasing. Lots of emotion too. I like the progression of age and how things escalate as the person gets older. She feels things more deeply as the abuse gets worse.

Well done!

bijiou36
Aug 16, 2010, 07:20 PM
Thanks!<3

Unknown008
Aug 17, 2010, 07:53 AM
Nice poems! They were as you said, sort of dark but it's okay :)

Now, time to get your other grades up. Don't hesitate to ask :)