whitemateria
Oct 14, 2007, 09:22 PM
I just wanted to know what everyone thought about my thesis statement on cosmetic surgery. I am writing a persuasive essay and I'm not for surgery so I'm trying to persuade others to see my point of veiw. So, I was wondering; does it need improvement or should I leave it be?
Here it is...
"Cosmetic surgery continues to become a solution to dealing with larger issues like low self esteem and depression; instead surgery itself has become an issue."
Here it is...
"Cosmetic surgery continues to become a solution to dealing with larger issues like low self esteem and depression; instead surgery itself has become an issue."