[mojokidz]

How do you write a short concise business profile to present to new clients. A professional version of "tell me a little about yourself". My target audience business that provide product/service in the fashion, textile, toy and health and beauty industries for babies and moms to be.

Many thanks!

[Wondergirl]

How about you write something and we will critique it. We have no idea what this business really does and its value to customers. Do the products lift spirits? Do they improve one's appearance? Do the products smell good? Are the products earth-friendly?

Does the profile need to sell, or just be matter-of-fact?

[mojokidz]

Just wanted to acknowledge your response... I will draft something and post it for critique. The suggested questions were great, already have some ideas brewing.

MoJoMommy:)

[Wondergirl]

Look at drugstore.com or at the drugstore section of Amazon or some other online company that has products that are similar to yours. Read the descriptions to pick up adjectives and adverbs and keywords.

[Clough]

Hi, mojokidz!

If you post a draft here, that would be great! It would also be advisable not to include any contact information so that it might be construed as being advertising.

If contact information is excluded, we'll be free to give you all sorts of ideas as to how you might make improvements to the draft of your business profile.

Thanks!