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KelsieAnne
Apr 9, 2013, 02:48 PM
Wanted to know if these lyrics are good? Give me feedback

Lookin' at you from the corner
Do you feel the same?
I seem to know everything about you...
When I don't know your name.
You notice me, you notice my eyes
But at night do you hear my cries?

I play hard to get
But I seem to get upset
Oh why is this happening
Now that were friends
I'll love you till the end
Do you know I feel this way..

I want us to be like the others
Not friends
True loved up lovers

There it is there not completely finished but I'd love for someone to maybe post a video on YouTube of them singing them if your shy you could just film the floor as long as I can hear you... please? Need to know what beat to put in make the video out to Kelsie and send me the link if you do it.. please?! :Dxx

Neelie
Apr 9, 2013, 11:07 PM
Sorry I don't sing, but I did think the lyrics were quite good. I'm sure with the right opportunities they could be the making of a good song :) Of course the problem is getting the opportunities... Good Luck :)

joypulv
Apr 10, 2013, 01:50 AM
Yes, nice lyrics, especially for someone so young and naïve that you think someone is going to put it to music, put it on YouTube, and send it out to the object of your affections.

Read Cyrano de Bergerac, or watch the movie Roxanne, a modern and funny take on the classic tale of a man who writes beautiful words of love but gives them to someone else to speak because he isn't as handsome.