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Is Noise the name of a real street?

Is Noise the name of a real street?

I want to put the streets are noise and crowded, driving is on the left side of the road .

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After twelve long years, I was excited to meet my relatives, friends, and various families from all over the world who had come to my cousin's wedding. Excitement overwhelmed me, since I knew I would be reconnected with all these people whom I haven't seen since I left India. My parents, my sibling, and I planned to visit our relatives in the different cities and villages of Gujarat. As we traveled by buses, taxis, and rickshaws from village to village and from city to city, I faced the now-unfamiliar lifestyles and struggles of living in India. But the experience of traveling on the opposite side of the road from what I am used to while riding buses, taxis, rickshaws, and trains was amazing--but so many crowded and noisy streets!

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I just need someone to edit my paragraph

Oh my good thank you I also want you to check this paragraphs for me please

By living in various countries has made me a multilingual person. By living in Panama I learned Spanish, then I learned English when I came to the United States of America, I also learned Gujurati and Hindi at home. Overcoming the language barrier was difficult in every country especially Gujurati which I'm still unable to write and read. During my trip to India the lack of reading and writing Gujurati was a disadvantage because, I was not able to understand where I was when I went out in the city. That's when I realized how important is to be educated in a language of a country where you going. . It's hard to read signs and communicate with people when you don't know Gujurati, not many people there speak English so you have to know their language.

Going to India I learn the few thing of my culture, my grandparents have explained to me many festivals we celebrate throughout the different regions in India and belief. My grandmother took me to a festival called Navarati. “It's a festival celebrates a god fighting a demon for nine days and being victorious on the tenth day,” said my grandmother, I was also told that every holiday or ceremony has a religious event behind them. By the time I could talk and understand what was going on, my peers have explained to me how things work in different ceremonies, holidays and festivals. The Indian culture consists of numerous diverse celebrations, depending on the region one is brought up in. Gujarat is the region where I am from in which I have stayed true to my culture and holidays. Spending time in India I also learned that women have limited role in the house, they have to take care of the house, family and kids while men goes out to work to earn money. Women can't wear clothes that exposes their body and can't talk to guys very openly neither they are allowed to have any type of relationship accept arrange marriage, this was very completely different from the culture I grew up in.

Do you have one sibling or more than one?

Do you have one sibling or more than one?

Just one siblings

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Living in various countries has made me a multilingual person. When living in Panama, I learned Spanish, then learned English when I came to the United States of America. I've also learned Gujurati and Hindi at home in India. Overcoming the language barrier was difficult in every country especially the language of Gujurati, which I’m still unable to write and read. During my trip to India, the lack of reading and writing Gujurati was a disadvantage because I was not able to understand where I was when I went out into the city. That’s when I realized how important is to be educated in a language of a country where you going. It’s hard to read signs and communicate with people when you don’t know Gujurati. Not many people there speak English, so you have to know their language.

Being in India again, I learned a few things about my culture. My grandparents have explained to me about many festivals that are celebrated throughout the different regions in India and about the beliefs surrounding them. My grandmother took me to a festival called Navarati. “It’s a festival that celebrates a god fighting a demon for nine days and being victorious on the tenth day,” said my grandmother. I was also told that every holiday or ceremony has a religious event behind it. By the time I could talk and understand what was going on, my peers have explained to me how things work in different ceremonies, holidays, and festivals. The Indian culture consists of numerous diverse celebrations, depending on the region one is brought up in. Gujarat is the region where I am from, and I have stayed true to my culture and celebrating holidays. While spending time in India, I also learned that women have a limited role in the house. They have to take care of the house, family, and kids, while the men go out to work to earn money. Women can’t wear clothes that expose the body and can’t talk to guys very openly. They are not allowed to have any type of relationship except an arranged marriage. This was completely different from the culture I grew up in.

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I got two more if you don't mind please

Why are you writing these paragraphs?

Why are you writing these paragraphs?

Its for an essay and I got to present in from of class, its my last essay and I needed someone to edit it but I could find no one but thank god that you are helping me I don't know how to thank you :)

But now it is sounding like Wondergirl and not like jakesmith. Are we cheating?

But now it is sounding like Wondergirl and not like jakesmith. Are we cheating?

No we are not cheating its like a presentation that goes with my power point
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Will you get a grade on the paragraphs?

No just on my powerpoint slides and speaking in front of teachers

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Going to my cousin's wedding was an wonderful experience in learning about my culture's celebrations of weddings. In a traditional wedding in India, the bride and groom are the result of an arranged marriage. The wedding last four days, and each day there is a different ceremony. Each ceremony has a different meaning for the marrying couple. A wedding in India is not just about two people, but is between two families. I still remember that day when my cousin had his first meeting with his future wife in the presence of her family members at my house. Once both families agreed to the marriage, they fixed the date for the wedding. There are also numerous rituals and ceremonies performed before and during the wedding. First, there is an engagement with a ring given, then there is a pre-wedding ceremony that involves an oral agreement between the two families. There is the "mehendi" ceremony where the bride and all the bride's friends and relatives gather together to have henna drawn on their hands--patterns of beautiful designs and the groom's name. After they have the "sanget" where guests invited by both the bride's and groom’s families, they gather to play "garba," the traditional folk dance form. The majority of the wedding ceremony will take place in "man-dap" where the bride and groom sit, where the priest says the spiritual vows or "mantras" from the Vedas.

Living in India is nothing compared to where I live in Florida. Living in the United State of America is nothing to compared to India where people don’t have a/c in their houses or have modern houses. There are no traffic lights on the streets unless it’s a big city, so there are traffic jams every day. The household consists of at least six or more people living under one roof because the parents live with the kids and grandkids to make one family united. Animals are all over the streets and around the homes. Some of the animals die of starvation or have some type of disease. Poverty in India is profound and very obvious! I never stopped noticing. Everywhere my sibling, parents, and I went there was someone begging for food or money. I always gave money, and never wanted to think of someone starving to death. It really stood out in my mind, the huge population and poverty level in India. I learned to be grateful for everything God has given me. There were thousands upon thousands of beggars living on the sidewalks and streets, kids with no clothes or food, women with torn clothes, men with long beards and no shirts, just pants on--all trying to find money to feed themselves. I was horrified to see this bad poverty and filthiness. I encountered more garbage and filth there than I could have ever imagined.

Check over the wedding part especially. I may have not understood how you wanted to say that section. I think the rest is okay with a few changes I made.

Check over the wedding part especially. I may have not understood how you wanted to say that section. I think the rest is okay with a few changes I made.

Change the whole wedding paragraph

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Why did you edit your posts after WG so graciously helped you? And then report the posts?

Were you afraid your teachers would find these posts and know you got help?

He did most of the work, and I edited based on my memories of Indian coworkers' weddings.

He did most of the work, and I edited based on my memories of Indian coworkers' weddings.


I agree, which is why his editing the posts and reporting them is puzzling.

I agree, which is why his editing the posts and reporting them is puzzling.
Guess what I will do the next time someone needs help editing. Go wild with your imagination.

I got similar treatment the other day when I asked "too many questions" and "didn't do the correcting."